Uncaged Raven

I lost the key to paradise in a dirty drain of horrid place.

Taken from center stage

My dark buried with psychological emotions

Now lives, locked inside the basement of my mind

Piece by piece it’s destroyed

Emotional acid rain cried out

But your yellow umbrella protects me

I wanted to start over but

Now I just want to move forward

With you…

I want you to feel special

Not just a face in the crowd

Your voice soothes my mind and soul

If I didn't have you, I couldn't see a future.

You play with the risk of being pinned down

Our love would never fade

It can’t be broken

And it can’t be ignored

The vast depths of my inside urges for you

You are a handpicked by all the goddess to

Lead the world’s beauty

Your eyes are stunning sapphires

That I can stare directly at my bare soul and you love it

Your golden yellow untangled hair drops

As a veil over your pale but a full of life face

Your touch is like a grace of a wonderful angel

Your large fast beating heart is mine

And I would never leave you behind

Your lips linger there, taunting me with lust

I have screw up so much in bloody and dark world

I have made a lot of mistakes but you were never one

The tastes of blood that used to fill my mouth,

Was replaced by the taste of you love

The smell of a rotting corpse of a man

Is disposed of by your warming smile

You saved me. You were there to pick up all the pieces.

You fought for me. And you never even blinked.

My words were wasted on dead

But now I live for you and the chance of us

I would say a billion words to make sure I have you,

But you simply want to hear three

I.LOVE.YOU

And I will always and forever feel love you and only you

My last breath is yours.

Reviews

[PaperLife]

THis tears and fades in and out but never leaves an ounce of emotion behind. it's bold and screaming but so painfully torn. But in the last sentence nothing but life is made inside of the death of those words.

"You fought for me. And you never even blinked."

I love this line. i don't know why but I do. I love how your words are like an ocean that flows so rapidly out like love pouring straight into the heart of the one you love.

You paint a world with love and feeling inside of these words. It was broken and scattered but in the end is so soft and loving. Its light is like nothing else. So beautiful and endearing and there's this feeling of your strong devotion and love really just really coming out as the story of words unfolds so kindly. Your thoughts are beautiful and capture my heart so elegantly. You have a way with your words and thoughts, so beautiful. I can't tell you how beautiful these are.

[Deandra Dawn]

Beautifully written with so much emotion. You did an amazing job.

[Manpreet]

have screw up so much in bloody and dark world

I have made a lot of mistakes but you were never one

The tastes of blood that used to fill my mouth,

Was replaced by the taste of you love
It is a complete masterpiece for people who are in love !!

[Tellie Allen]

i liked it. thanks for sharing the emotion with all of us.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This is absoutely beautiful and amazing! You done a great job. I would have to say my favorite line is "If I didn't have you, I couldn't see a future". I know how that feeling, to have when loving someone so much like that.
Well done!!! :)


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[quarintine_deathangel]

Heartbreaking, toturous and emotional turbulence and personification really well is expressed heavily here, a harsh concept taken to a disturbing and cool light. Nice job! Eventhough I'm not a big fan of this genre, it was really cool to read and very interesting, thanx for the read request ^.^

[Destiny Crawford]

Truly beautiful! :) I really did love this :) Great job!

~Destiny

[quixotic_rose]

I figured it out. I love your writing style and choice of words. Not positive on which writing style it is but it makes me happy. ALSO capital letters are yummy. I was going to actually quote a line I loved, but I just can't do it. Maybe next time ol' chap.

[Ashley]

i rly like this. very well done. every line gets my attention even more.

Well done. written with strong intent and emotion.

[Katty]

This is an amazing piece, It is sad, has some heart wrenches, it has happiness and has a smooth sound too it. I do love this piece and is very sad.