Muddled Thoughts

Love is a confusing thing, and the mind works in unusual ways. Here is just my own personal example of that. :)

I started this off with something to say,

There was a point...but it flew away.

 

Oh, wait, there it is!

 

But...oh...it's relevance seems to be gone.

Vanished. Poof. Gone away with the dawn.

 

For now it is night.

 

Dark. Alone. Cold. I pull the quilt over my head,

Rolling from side to side, in this large empty bed.

 

Wait, where the hell am I?

 

I sit up, I peer out the curtain,

My surroundings, unfamiliar, my mind, uncertain.

 

Someone walks by the window.

 

What?! Who is he?

I lie back down, wondering if he has seen me.

 

The door opens.

 

I look up, at a familiar face,

Oh the comfort, when I finally know my place.

 

I smile in his direction.

 

Ah, my memory pulls through!

My eyes now see through the misty hue.

 

He gets into the bed beside me.

 

My point flies back, nestles in my brain,

And now I know what I was about to say.

 

I'm in love.

 

 

 

Yes, that is all...

 

Author's Note

Just wrote this as I went along, took maybe 10 minutes? Not sure if it's that good, but I like how it turned out anyways :) All feedback is greatly appreciated, thank you!

Reviews

[KeeD]

I like how you presented this.. I liked the suspense and to be honest this feels so real like anyone could feel this way and for that fact it's written well cause when the reader can relate to material and be like hey that could be me, i'm alone in this big empty bed.. but alas babygirls in the shower!

[DarkRainbowPie]

Thanks very much :) Always good to know you've written a relatable piece c:

[KeeD]

haha haven't written a relatable piece as yet at least I don't think i have, it's just that I can relate my life with this piece. thanks for posting.

[DarkRainbowPie]

No bother, thank YOU for the review :)

[Deuces]

This was cool. Suspenseful, yet comical and cute. I love writings that express the omnipresent thought process. Very unique!

[DarkRainbowPie]

Haha, aw, thank you very much! :')

[Invisible]

a bit obscure, it's meaning trailing away into another, leaving the reader almost guessing, yet revealing itself in the end all the same. an interesting approach to be sure.

[DarkRainbowPie]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on it :)

[Invisible]

you are welcome :)

[Holly Mason]

love the 10 minute writes very nice thank you for sharing

[DarkRainbowPie]

Thank YOU for the review! ^_^

[C.C. Marx]

HEY!!!! that sound like my brain, bouncing from thought to thought like a kindergartener on a sugar high, especially when it comes to love. Love is such a confusing thing, nicely done :)

[DarkRainbowPie]

Haha, it's hard to stay focused sometimes, isn't it? :) Thanks very much ^_^

[C.C. Marx]

It really is!! My pleasure

[Mike Emil]

good...that's what poems and all writings are for jauting down ideas

[DarkRainbowPie]

Thanks ^_^

[The Nude Writer]

Wow, this is really cool. I have the worst memory so I can understand :) Awesome poem :)

[DarkRainbowPie]

Haha, thanks very much :)

[The Nude Writer]

Ps.. Dig your specs :)

[DarkRainbowPie]

Aha, thanks :'D