Identity Crisis

Stare deep into my soul and tell me what you see

Fragrant valleys, polluted cities, distorted reality

Heaven and hell and everything in between

Stare right into my heart and tell me what you see

Who am I?

What sets me apart?

the fire inside of me, is it still blazing?

Or is it no longer my part ?

Let me look into the mirror and wonder what I see

A blank stare, fiery eyes; I get chills down my spine

Look at me and tell me

Just tell me and set me free

Am I who I show to the world?

A cheerful, happy persona

Do I dare to look at the part of me

hidden within my being?

My true nature, somebody please help me see

Somebody please uncover my soul for me

Author's Note

constructive criticism greatly appreciated!!

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

"Look at me and tell me
Just tell me and set me free."

There is obviously frustration and confusion in this poem. The speaker struggles to find a proper identity for themselves.

"My true nature, somebody please help me see
Somebody please uncover my soul for me."

But I also sense an appreciation for oneself hidden between the lines. The author also, perhaps unaware, believes that they are rich and full of life experiences and both sweetness, beauty and pain.

There is great self-worth and also an intense search for identity. By asking the right questions, the author already has found the right answers.

"Knock and it shall be opened."

Never stop writing!

~Aysha.

[Elizabeth]

Thank you so much for your review :)) I am glad you like this poem

[barleygirl]

I was drawn to what you have posted below your profile title: "Be courageous and try to write in a way that scares you a little" . . . this is great advice & this poem exemplifies what you're saying in that line. This is really fresh writing. Besides your well-modulated & balanced & sparkling line crafting, the message is profound, as if looking into a mirror to find oneself. To me, the best writers can be gut-wrenchingly honest with themselves about who & how they are. Your suggestion (knowing oneself) produces very authentic writing. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Elizabeth]

Thank you so much for your review... I'm really glad that you enjoyed this one:)

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I really loved this and enjoyed the read Thankyou

[Elizabeth]

Thank you for your review :)

[lightsong]

superb my friend, superb powerful write yet it flows with a gentle tune, Your first verse struck me and my most favorite, it was as though Earth was speaking, but aren't we after all a whole universe in our tiny bodies? embrace all Your parts, good and bad, share them with those who love, care and understand, embrace Your whole being and You will be guided through the road, it's no use if You acted like they are not there, uncover them to be free.

I really enjoyed reading Your rich thoughts and deep personal journey this morning my friend, Thank You.

[Elizabeth]

Thank you so much for your review :) your words always bring a smile to my face 😊

[lightsong]

You are most welcome my dear, Your poem deserves it as You deserve it too ♥️

[Suhd]

This poem has a universal appeal. The questions asked are so crucial and at the same time quite important to our existence. I could easily relate to this poem entirely. Bravo!

[Elizabeth]

Thank you so much for your kind words :)

[Suhd]

Pleasure!!!

[Paul Bell]

What identity are you today? Does it depend on who you meet?
In actual fact, you'll need all sorts of identities as you move through life. Embrace them all, and have fun with them.

[Elizabeth]

Thank you so much for your comment :))

[emmajoy]

The ability to write as you do is a key to anything you want.. just have to gently turn it to learn who and what you are. Surely? Perhaps, maybe.. somewhere along the way, discovering that too much intensity isn't the best friend to have alongside all the time. Better to look outwards perhaps, focus on the 'All around', there's so much to see and learn from. Your language is finely put.. makes one think too, but.. a smile's always appreciated.. ..

[Elizabeth]

Thank you so much for your review :) I'll keep your words in my mind

[emmajoy]

Don't mean to preach, always meant kindly and appreciatively, promise. :)

[Elizabeth]

Of course... I'm really thankful for your words:)

[emmajoy]

Smiling at least ten characters.