Rain Over Me

 

I step outside & stare into the sky,
A mix of light and dark grey,
Hinting, threatening, prophesizing
The upcoming storm.

 

Go ahead, I say.
Rain over me.
Throw every drop you can.
Pour the oceans on my face
& the lakes into my shoes.
I will stay out & laugh at the empty threat.

 

Lighting strikes,
A jagged white line like the sky has been broken.
Thunder roars, seconds later,
No threat, just the elements in play.

So go ahead,
Rain over me.
I'll play right along side you.

Reviews

[T. L. O'Neal]

A positive poem and outlook on things. You could have made it a gloomy type of poem but instead you turned it around. Kudos on that. T

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I love this poem, I think that it has a great view on life in a way... you won't let the elements take you down... It kind of made me think of how one cartoon character always has a cloud of rain pouring down on him and he's really gloomy and such.... This shows that no matter how bad the rain is... it wont bring the person down.... Great Job! Now i wish it would rain lol...

[Fantasyfairy]

Nice. Every day it can rain, but there will always be sunlight sometimes. The beginning is dark, and then the end finishes it on a playful, happier note. Its nice. its well written, has a good flow and drifts along nicely. XX

[Melody P-]

a dreary like situation turned around:) gotta love that aspect to things;)
I really enjoyed the second stanza** and the repeating of the "rain over me" beautiful**
for a few minute on a whim write..it's great- you should do that more often;p

[Avoiry]

I like this because i can relate to being the person who isnt afraid to take on the world . I really like how you worded this it is very powerful keep it up

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is good and quick writes can sometimes be our best.. well in most peoples cases.
The verse below i really like it is very creative and metaphoric.. love this one Jared.

Go ahead, I say.

Rain over me.

Throw every drop you can.

Pour the oceans on my face

& the lakes into my shoes.

I will stay out & laugh at the empty threat.

Pretty wonderful!

[Brette Medb]

I love rain storms! For some reason they have always calmed me, made me feel one with everything around me, and now that I sound like a complete hippie... I really liked this a lot, it embodied the free spirit and the wild side of nature. Great write.


Brette