The Kiss

 

Darkened dreams haunting me to awake,

battles are fierce pulling the web of dark life.

No light to flicker as quiet thoughts unravel me,

deceit plays, a heart of time.

Images move swift and shadows dance in my name.

I am awakened, the kiss of breath be mine.

Reviews

[Inda]

This is full of great imagery and the build up is good, but feels like it's unfinished.

[DarkBeauty]

Thanks do you have any suggestions to proceed to a longer more finished style?

[Inda]

I would elaborate on the kiss and it's effect as a way of closing this piece, but that's my approach.

[DarkBeauty]

Sounds like a great idea, i'm going to start thinking of a closing and thanks so much for your feed back

[Inda]

No prob; you're a great poet, glad I can at least read your work.