Awakening

Drum beat of heart
calling to my soul
dances of praise
of once upon a time
I know

Painted faces
songs gushing from heart
listening to the pieces
that have not departed
from my soul

Hearing the echo of the winds
that rejoice
distant memories now
become the noise of drums
connections felt strong and true

Playing the pieces
of the drum beats flow
rapture exists here no more
as I dance in the night sky

Remembrance of my ghost song
so bold and true
beautiful awakening
upon the morning dew

Author's Note

Rough Draft

Reviews

[NZane]

Wow.. I can almost feel the "drum beat"
Good job :)

[Inyourshadow]

Love the final stanza ghost and dew reminds me of the twilight fog rolling in between not quite night but not yet day, eerie and yet so beautiful just like your poem, love it, leave it be it knows it's own mind. Keep em' coming

[Amila Jay]

Nice:)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Not bad. Worth the read.

[Dove]

This piece has a nice flow to it, It was a nice smooth read. Keep up th great work.

[rwar ish me]

I really enjoyed reading this.
It is very good and well written.
~Amai

[~Sarah~ Idríel T..]

Awesome job Hun! Love it! :)

[sivan]

great write... wouldnt say its a rough also nice theme because it wasnt what i was expecting

[Jeremy Baker]

For a rough draft this is very accomplished. Good work.

[Miranda Manne]

Interesting world play, but it lacks something that engages me...I'm not sure what it is. It is disjointed, like a beautiful dream...though perhaps it is missing a conclusion that suggests the Awakening of the title?

The rhythm is interesting, and the words meld together. An awesome rough draft, to be certain. I hope you continue to work on it!