Time

Each moment moves fast
present day does not last
full of tainted pride
glorious rays shed no light
at the break of dawn
The will is weakened
for darkness stands ahead

Evening soon falls
upon bloody swords of violent vengence
my shield falls
broken and bruised
and the day is done

The battle of defeat
a cursed memory forever to last
a new day will arise
through the corridors of wicked time
demons of the dark hand
rose above as they wander over our will
which fell fast to rest
as the dark stood still

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

Love the line "As the dark stood still" This poem is dark and it takes you down a twisted eerie path. This has all the things that horror should have. It lets the mind roam free to places but you still have enough detail to show us the direction in which our minds should go. Time is one of those things that can be our friend or our enemy. You have creatively drawn a mental image of that.

[rwar ish me]

Amazing, very dark writes.
But very well done.
~Amai

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Oooohhh...
Dark and well-penned, once again!

[Roxi L]

Amazing and wonderful. Its beautiful.

[DarkAngel]

I agree with Poetic Justice. This is definitely an eloquent write

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time is such an interesting format to work with..you have captured an essense with this eloquent write

[Larry Dyson]

could publish this alone as "Tainted Pride".. "


Each moment moves fast
present day does not last
full of tainted pride
glorious rays shed no light
at the break of dawn
The will is weakened
for darkness stands ahead"

[Amila Jay]

Amazing indeed and meaningful, this is a great write and some really catching words and the tone of it is nice:)

[LinBin]

You are a very talented wordsmith, you write with such flair...this is a fine example of your work x

[Raven Starhawk]

Humans make time such a desperate fool. Your poem gets the old noddle working again after a long night of blah. I liked the last few lines the best. For some reason they grabbed me by the shirt collar. Excellent write.