Within Me

Currents pulling me deep under
echoing sounds are haunting to my ears
Visions of emotions I can see
when will I ever awake
from this depth of a blow

Can not find the surface
but i try with all my might
circles of the past
creep so slow
Love is beckoning me

Eluding my soul
I hear the cry's
Love's pain and torment
That have arrived
It holds me tight

Caged within this fight
I search for peace
but the love that's calling me
Is fast asleep

I feel the aches and try to remember
the love that cherished my heart
Many forgotten footsteps
I start to look back

To much hurt to fight my way through
so down under in emotions I flow
I am lost to this love
Within me

Author's Note

Rough Draft

Reviews

[LinBin]

This rough draft doesn't need changing, it is good as it is x

[MissAngelica]

I like this very much....i can absolutely identify with it. this piece is quite beautifully written :)

[~*. Jade Black .*~]

Love has many ways of reminding us of the past and we may lose it in the end to endless emotion. Wonderful poem quite elegant I must say.
Impressive to read only to come from a true writers mind.

[Lily Mae]

You have an amazing ability to take your reader on the journey with you.. Excellent write..xx

[November Gold]

To much hurt to fight my way through
so down under in emotions I flow
I am lost to this love
Within me

These, for me, were some of the most powerful lines. Your writing is awesome!

[NZane]

.... I've got nothing to say, other than: "Wow"

[NightShade]

you... Rise... ENORMOUS! As a talent that should be known...

[Thea]

"To much hurt to fight my way through
so down under in emotions I flow
I am lost to this love
Within me"
I love how the poem ends...Very well worded...Great piece... :)))

[J Todd Underhill]

Nothing rough about this one, you keep selling yourself and your abilities short. You just keep cranking our masterpiece after masterpiece. You have got to be related to Plath.