just... me...

just... me...

A Poem by DarkArtz 0703
"

the feelings that get to me

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This numbness is all the same

My life right now feels like a game

As everyone I love goes out like a flame

It's like there only me and no one else to blame


Once again I sit and cry

Under the deep yet cloudless sky

Because no matter how hard I try

Everyone I love still says goodbye


Scares and ink scatter my skin

Any second and the anxiety will kick in

If I think of them my head will spin

No matter how hard I try I'll never win

© 2017 DarkArtz 0703


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I am always here for you, you know that. I will never say goodbye. What I love about this poem which honestly I keep reading, is the constant rhyming in each stanza. I love how you write keep it up.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"it's like *there's only me.....blame"
*Scars (not "scares", unless that's an australianism).

This is when all is said and done a genuine gem. Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is awesome, you captured such a dark feeling perfectly.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

thank you very much for your review
tragically dejected

Great Read

Matthew

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review
This is a topic not just relatable to you but to me and others who read this as well.when people you love say goodbye a piece of you leaves with them.the hole inside of you doesn't grow back and it can not be replaced

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

yeah... I've lost a lot of my heart this year
This a brilliant description of loss. People come and leave your life like walking through a rotating door. Excellent poem!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

yeah once again I was crying when I wrote that
Lykos

7 Years Ago

Strong feelings definitely make people add more depth to their poems. You included. From the heart t.. read more
DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

thank you very much A.
Amazing read........
This numbness is all the same
My life right now feels like a game.
Wkth no controls in my hand..
So of course,
No matter how hard I try I'll never win



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

thank you very much
I love this it really brings out your emotion a lot

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

it's completely true sometimes.... but I know there is somebody that cares
King Spark

7 Years Ago

Aww, I get like that a lot especially at times and I don't want to... and yeah there is ❤
DarkArtz 0703

7 Years Ago

thank you again

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