drowning in my thoughts

Depression eating away at my mind

that's it,

im nearly gone,

i'll never fit,

I guess it's never done,

the voice breaks my walls,

they say stupid s***,

they dig in their claws,

im dumb i'll admit,

they stare,

they snicker,

do they care,

if I die quicker?,

the rumors spread,

they voices scream.

I wish I was dead,

my mind splitting at the seems,

Author's Note

sorry if you feel the same

Reviews

[AiH]

This is so heartbreaking. I remember when there was a time when I didnt want to live either, it took me years to scratch , claw and dig my way out of that f*cking mess . Your poem is beautiful and tragic and i hope that writing helps exorcise those thoughts.

[DarkArtz 0703]

I try to.. some times it works sometimes not so much you know?

[AiH]

yes i do unfortunately. just keep working towards life, i promise it's worth it, even if right now it doesnt seem like it. your very talented. keep writing!

[DarkArtz 0703]

thank you and I will

[Cole Thomas]

Your poems paint pictures. I'll keep saying it until it's not true anymore.

[EJ's Horror]

As someone who'd recently dug out of a pit of depression, I feel your poem to be a voice. Pat on the back for you!

[DarkArtz 0703]

thank you so much

[Miles W.]

This is a very interesting take on what it means to feel these kinds of emotions. A lot of poems that I have read try to mention the struggles real quick then jump away to something empowering. But this does a good job of showcasing that feelings like these doesn't go away as easily as we would like them to. The word flow and stanza breaks work really well here. I really felt the power and emotion behind each piece of this poem. Very well done.

[DarkArtz 0703]

thank you

[John the Baptist]

Actually, I don't, but if I did, I'd seek therapy and medication.

[DarkArtz 0703]

im in constant therapy and I take medication.
thanks for the review but that sounds harsh from the way im taking it

[John the Baptist]

Did not mean for it to sound that way. I worked in mental health for many years, and therapy and medication brought the best results for the most people.

[DarkArtz 0703]

oh im sorry for taking it badly now thank you for giving me a review anyway