Drowning

Dying at the hands of those that don't matter

A sign on my head reads "use me"
On the back it says "breaking my heart is the fee"
Some take this as a challenge and do it a lot
Forgive and forget, or so I've been taught
They say its all in my head and I need to smile
Little do they know, depression has been around a while
Don't know how long I can put up this act
I'm drowning and dying slowly, that's a fact

Author's Note

It rhymes, maybe not in the best way but I don't care. I'm no Hemingway but I'm not gonna give up.

Reviews

[Taz]

Sadly I can relate to this all to well, Beautifully portrays the facts of how you are feeling. Amazing job, my favorite line is "Forgive and forget, or so i've been taught." because there is this girl who I know and she back stabbed me many times but every time she did she would tell me to just forgive and forget.

[Country boy183798]

Deep and sincere! I really enjoyed reading it. It does rhyme well like you said. But just remember that poetry is not all about rhyming, so don't worry much about how good your rhymes are. Some of the greatest poems are unrhymed and some of the greatest poets wrote free verse. For instance, take this short poem as an example:
The fog comes
on little cat feet.
It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.
It's from Carl Sandburg, and if people were to judge him on his rhymes he'd make a horrible poet.
A good poem, at least in my opinion, is the one that opens a window through which the reader would see a more illumining reality, or a poem that can capture the emotions, and conveys the thoughts of the author to the reader, in a way that they can feel the words as they read them. And you have done just that. In fact, you have done it very well. So you're the writer, and you choose what words to use and how to use them. If you want them to rhyme, then make them rhyme, if you feel you don't need them to, then they don't have to.
Anyhow, great poem, one that I enjoyed reading. Well done and keep on writing!