Dear...

to a friend, that wasnt really a friend.

Dear Ex-Friend,

I ran out of strikes. Ok, let me rephrase. YOU, ran out of strikes. I gave you all 3.

My life is a game. I seek information, details, things that will interest me. I use people as chess pieces, moving them around on my board. Sometimes, I do make friends, but when I do, I don't involve them in my game. I move them into my actual life. And in my actual life, I don't have to play, I can just be who I actually am.

You didn't give me information, details, or things of any interest to me. Your chess piece always got beaten. You didn't become one of my friends, either. Instead you gave me insults. Insults that at first I chose to ignore. But then, there always comes a day, when you get tired of all the nonsense and lies. I got tired of the lies. I got annoyed by all of the nonsense that you spoke. That is when you started earning your checkmates.

Checkmate!

Checkmate!

Checkmate!

You’ re out! Out of my game. Out of the possibility of becoming my friends. Out of my life. 

Best Regards, 

The girl who kept on

giving you chances.

Author's Note

This is not about me.

Reviews

[Bear]

The baseball references "three strikes and your out" has got to be the best way to telling someone it is over, you don't have to explain it to them as everyone knows what it means. It saves you from mentioning harmful details or having to go into a long drawn out explanation so it picked a good format for your poem.
I do have some comments for you to consider, (My life is a game, that I play) as you can't live someone else's life I would take the my out of this line "Life is a game that I play". (I use people as chess pieces. Moving them around the board) you want everyone to remember this is your game so you should identify it as such "I use people like chess pieces moving them around on my board". (Sometimes, though, I make friends. And when I do, I don't involve them in my game. I involve them in my actual life) here you need to make the wall between the game and your real life stronger "Sometimes, I make friends but when I do I don't involve them in my game. I place them in my actual life". (You didn't give me information, details, things that will interest me) you need an identifier word in this line "You didn't give me any information, details or things of any interest to me". (Then I started giving you strikes) you want this to be a powerful statement line "That is when you started earning your strikes". These are only suggestions and not a slight on your story as you have it, this short story could easily be built upon and made into a great story line of a novel. Well done my friend Clap! Clap! :~)

[justdandy]

I thank you for taking the time to read, and then reread in order to correct me. I have made some of the changes.

[Bear]

Oh I like the changes you have made, it has a flow when you read it and everything fits together very well. Bravo! Clap! Clap!

[justdandy]

Yupee!! Thank you soo much...

[Rebecca]

I love the baseball reference with the three strikes. My favourite part is definitely the chess game comparison. My one suggestion is at the end perhaps using some more imagery for a stronger finish.