Danny No More

Danny is dead

There is nothing left of him, not a shred

He is just an empty shell

His soul was left somewhere in his cell

 

No longer does he smile

He’s not even worthwhile

He won’t even talk

It’s as if his voice has a lock

 

If he told a joke

He’d probably choke

Make people laugh?

Only if you hit him with a staff

 

Danny is gone

He disappeared at the crack of dawn

Everyone wants him back

But his soul has turned black

 

There is no light in his eye

As he can no longer cry

The first to go was his crazy side

There is nothing inside

All that’s left is an empty hide

His heart washed out with the tide

Danny is no more

All that’s left is a bore

He never made it back from his inner war

Danny is no more.

Author's Note

I wrote this in probably the darkest days of my life. I praise God that he got me through those days :)

Reviews

[Riley Justine]

I. love. this. poem. It is insanely well-written and so emotional. I notice (for me too) that darker feelings are easier to put down in words

[Rene Salinas]

Fell into black days. I related to this instantly and i liked the fact the the sequence of events was easy to follow and that every line added an extra moment of emotion weighed by dark matter. And as it went he is letting is now that (Poor? or Lucky I will keep hammering that question) that to the threshold he must go. Becuase nothins stays still and Dannys development is at hand. And as he stand will nothing but precepice in front he says "f**k it" and he jumps.

What you did not see is I jumped behind

Thankyou

[Dinesh Dharme]

The powerful emotions in those lines does indicate that the writer must be going through it.
In order to call such emotions to actions is very difficult.

[John Ryan]

There is no light in his eye
As he can no longer cry
The first to go was his crazy side
There is nothing inside
All that’s left is an empty hide
His heart washed out with the tide
Danny is no more
All that’s left is a bore
He never made it back from his inner war
Danny is no more.

powerful writing

[Lexi]

I can really relate to this piece, it's so tragic and upsetting. The feeling of breathing but feeling dead inside, as though your not entirely sure you aren't dead. The want to be nothing, to be done. The loneliness of nobody really noticing or not caring enough to bother. Empty and numb you've lost yourself, would drink what happened to that little bright eyed child you used to be. This is so beautiful written and illustrates your struggles well, so that even one who has never felt like this can look inside and understand for even the briefest moment what it's like. Exceptional job in the portrayal of this :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have been here, Danny...i can relate...once i lost my sense of humor, i knew i was in trouble...
it took a lot to get it back, and took even more to get me back.

thanks for sharing this.

[Dannyisawriter]

Your welcome. And it's nice to know I'm not the only one who's been there :)

[Josh Anderson]

It's a long road, that's for sure. Nice piece of writing, with some beautiful emotion. Good to know you pulled through!