Violet Blue

My final early poem that i'll be posting.

Violet Blue

I believe infinity, looking at your eyes
I want to hold you tight, through this violet sky
To feel the warmth of your body through an eternal night. 
Im driven crazy and confused all because of you

Im driven by darkness when your are gone
My love is violet, and my soul blue
Tell me all your sadness, i'll hold you tight
You shiver in my arms, and glow like the moon

Be silent, my beautiful, let wonder in your eyes
Nothing else matters if you are here
My hours pass by like seconds,
The Night is never its never long enough to get lost in lust

All its silent when you are gone,
My skies are violet, and my heart blue
Love me one more night, let me hold you
My lonely arms beg for you

 

The night is too short, to love you
When your by my side eternity isnt enough
Cast me into the shadows
All i want and ask for is one last night in your arms

Author's Note

same as the other posts. Go easy on me these were my very first works!

Reviews

[Dark Rider]

Well, it's a lot better than I can do. :) I can't right poems at all, and this is really good.

[Otingocni]

I like the flow of this piece. These two lines confused me though. Either they are missing punctuation or there are some words mistyped. "The Night is never its never long enough to get lost in lust" and "All its silent when you are gone," I love the lines..."My skies are violet, and my heart blue
Love me one more night, let me hold you
My lonely arms beg for you." Of course, I would add a "to" at the end of that third line because I am a sucker for rhyme. I respect your non-rhming flow though. I cannot seem to write that way. My heart automatically wants to rhyme things.

[Cherrie Palmer]

desire and passion always a big hit

Nice imagery! Btw, is your second word meant to be infinitely?? A few grammatical errors, but apart from those, the work is really good :) :)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I'm not very big on "love poetry" but love seems to be the biggest theme going in any genre. As far as love poems go, this was quite exceptional; a bit over the top in sentimentality perhaps but isn't romance always? For some of your earliest work, I'd say this was very well done.

[Edalene Connell]

The imagery is wonderful. This was very well written. It sounds like a strong love, and sometimes it seems like nothing can satisfy it. Not even if you held them all through the night.