A Young Life

Life

I was only eight when she left.

Packed her bags and took his heart,

when I was only eight

It hardly mattered.

The world lay humbly at my feet

At eight years old.

 

I was only fourteen when she died

Fell peacefully asleep with my mama’s smile,

when I was only fourteen.

It mattered a little, I guess

For the world turns cold and vicious,

at fourteen years of age

 

I was only fifteen when he left.

Receded into the depths of his mind,

When I was only fifteen

It hardly mattered.

The world was laughing cruelly

at fifteen years of age

 

I was only sixteen when he died

Took my smile and broke my heart,

at only sixteen years of age.

I don’t like to think it mattered a lot (but it did).

For the world had turned against me,

by sixteen years of age.

Author's Note

feedback and constructive criticism always appreciated

Reviews

[CC]

Thats alot... also there is a major story there... alot of possibility i am intrigued

[Greg Skura]

Wow such tragedy at a young age! The world is full of pain and loss, this poem demonstrates it well! Thank you for sharing!

[Cynthia]

Sixteen years with this whole matter of changes, this really hurts.

Took my smile and broke my heart

A very nice line, maybe htis is not hte one with most emotion inside, but it's the line which gives me a strong feeling..
Beautiful Write!