Broken Wings

Longing for adoration

Starved for affection

Wretched angel

Hiding behind her angel wings

 

Deplorable acts --- no atonement

Punishment, eternal damnation

Her wings wont grant her what she needs

 

 A rescue, salvation, an escape

 

With blackened eyes

and now a darker soul

She sings sailors to their deaths

 

Lifeless bodies sink

to the depths of no tomorrow

Boats crash upon rocks

Of unending grief and sorrow

 

Moon goddess divine

Stares up at the stars

Prays to the gods above 

But prayers fall upon deaf ears

 

Cast out of the heavens

She Seeks refuge down below

But Lucifer didn’t want her

She still had wings 

 

Stuck between

Heaven and hell

In a state of endless

Purgatory

 

With nothing left to do

She continues to sing

Poor sailors 

Reviews

[Mary]

love this- especially "cast out of the heavens... Lucifer didn't want he"r; wonderful visuals - I can just picture her the blackened eyes, darker soul; poor sailors

[symmetryAsymmetry]

This is great storytelling...the scene created is so vivid and events unfold with such grace, it grips the reader. Very good work :-)

[Tarry Franck]

This is a wonderful poem - Cast out of the heavens and Lucifer didn't want her - magnificent!

[Mark D]

Amazing poem. Really enjoyed it. Thanks

[Ezekiel Silver]

This is a very vivid and clear poem. It brings a lot into the mind. Nice work!

[Hiddenfire]

"Moon goddess divine
Stares up at the stars
Prays to the gods above
But prayers fall upon deaf ears"

I love this part for the idea that even though she is a "goddess" she still has her own betters and leaders that she hopes and strives to please. I assume she's a siren, and the piece has the feel that one of her kinds songs is bound to play.

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice vision create by this amazing poem. I like the story in the poem. I like the desire and the ending of this poem.
"Cast out of the heavens
She Seeks refuge down below
But Lucifer didn’t want her
She still had wings "
No weakness in this poem. Create a vision of beauty and I like the ending a lot. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote