The date

Sarah and Erick are going on à date. Let's see what happens.

After driving for a few minutes, I arrived at our date. Sarah is already there and she looks like an angel, with her white shirt, long brown hair and beautiful green eyes.

‘Hey,’ she says. I can feel the butterflies flying in my stomach.

‘Hey!’
‘The night is just beautiful.’

‘Yeah, you’re right.’

‘Don’t you want to sit next to me?’

‘Yeah sure.’ I replied. She’s making me shy.
 After talking for a while, she grabs my hand. I can feel the energy she gives me and look at her. She smiles and I smile back.
‘You have a beautiful smile,’ I said, ‘A very beautiful smile.’
She looks me deep in my eyes and whispers ‘kiss me.’
She closes her eyes. 
I close my eyes.
I can almost smell her parfume and her breathe. 
It’s just we, and nobody else. Nobody can take this moment away from me. Nobody. 
Just before our lips are touching each other, we hear a loud noise.

‘What was that sound?’ Sarah asks. ‘It sounded like a gunshot.’

‘Maybe just a flat tire. It’s just nothing. Don’t be afraid, there’s nothing to be afraid of Sarah.’ I reply. I take her into my arms, but then another loud sound echoed through the forest.

‘I am afraid’ she whispers.

‘Come, take my hand. We’re leaving, okay?’ I’m also afraid, but I have to look tough for her, so she isn’t scared. Her eyes aren’t sweet and lovely anymore, but scared and sad. ‘Don’t be scared Sarah. I’m here and I’ll protect you. You’re save here with me.’
She smiles. Even when she’s afraid, her laugh can make me feel good. God, she’s just perfect. I don’t know if I could survive without her. A third loud sound is sucking me back into reality. 

‘S**t! Sarah, come on. We need to go! I’ll get you out of here!’
She doesn’t respond.
‘Come on Sarah, let’s go!’ I scream. 
She still doesn’t respond. Her body is white as a ghost and her eyes are staring into the nothing in front of her. Than I see what’s wrong. 

A red spot on her white shirt. 

A red spot, that keeps getting bigger and bigger.

I scream her name for a last time, before I see her falling to the ground.

Author's Note

I know that there are grammar mistakes, english isn't my first language, so if you could help me with that, that's great! What do you think of the story?

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

nice .... can't tell you are from any where else
great spelling writers will make mistakes I do that when
I am writing is why you go over it. welcome to writers Café
nice write

[wordman]

kept me on the edge of my seat enjoyed the read waiting on the next chapter
where she survives I hope