Your Touch

Just a few things put together, first attempt at slight Erotica. Enjoy all reviews are welcome :) good or bad

Your Touch

One look from your lustful eyes is all i need

Giving me permission to please

As our bodies draw nearer a fire ignites

Lust and passion reaching boiling point

My hand moving like a snake over your body

Pinpoint precision with every touch

Your breath labors as i pull you close

Our lips meet, quenching our desires

Face to face, sweat dripping down our faces

The fire erupts into an intense, frenzied inferno

We breath each other in intensely 

No patch of skin left unexplored

The sweet taste drives us insane

Begging for more 

We delve into our deepest desires

A sexual, sensual romance, consuming our hearts 

This moment seems to last forever

Filthy, dirty yet so pure and intense

We embrace every move as if to never have it again 

Gripping tightly every pulse is strong

This is so right yet so wrong

Ecstasy, stricken by pure pleasure, the point of no return

And now we lay in all our spleandour 

Not a care in the world

Steamy and tired in each others arms

Retiring to slumber

So we can dream once more 

Author's Note

Any help would be greatly appreciated
i also need to know if people want me to go dirtier and more explicit or to keep it calm like this one?

Reviews

[David Wesley]

For me I want the grit and dirt and slapping and all that jazz. =P

But it works here. It could go either way. Maybe try focusing on either/or for your next. They certainly have different tones.

[Flutterby aish]

I like the part where it's wrong , dirty n filthy according to the point of view of society bt pure, intense n right according to u cause dats hw u r feeling at that point of time!!!!!

[Daniel Grant]

thats exactly what i wanted people to feel like when reading it :) thanks for the review

[Flutterby aish]

welcome!!!! :)

[Akira Kodama]

I loved this. The detail was amazing. Great piece, I think.

[Daniel Grant]

thank you very much it was only my first try :)

[Lover Of Words]

Very detailed nice work

[Daniel Grant]

thank you very much, this was only my first attempt, i need to know if people want me to go dirtier or keep it calm like this one :)