Motion picture

The game of life.....

An invisible life,
Crowned with beauty,
A mind that's lost,
But a feeling of duty.

In it for the glory,
From a flash in which we came,
A motion picture of a story,
Created from this, a simple game.

Climbing every mountain,
Knowing your own truth,
Is the strongest way to see this place,
With strength you'll have your proof.

Shaping what is given,
Out of fear, regret and shame,
Is it any wonder we worry,
For all, it seems a pain.

You can't stop the movement,
Once you have arrived,
It's all a massive picture show,
Thoughts, feelings, we're alive.

I use this pen to write,
Creating stories from a mind,
For another to comprehend,
In a different space and a different time.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

This makes me think of an actor and what struggles they must go through walking the line between life and motion picture. It can also apply to people who paint a smile on their face and act happy when they're really dying inside.
Very well written, simple yet has so many meanings.
Just one thing,
"Thoughts, feeling, were alive."
Did you mean, "Thoughts, feeling, we're alive."?
Or, "Thoughts, feelings, were alive."?
Or, "Thoughts, feelings, we're alive."?

[Daniel Dawes]

Thanks for the review.......I have made the changes :)

[Bluefire]

Nice and no problem, glad to help. ^^

[Claire in VA]

I like your style-- basic rhythm and rhyme that bring about such PROFOUND meanings.
Good job!
~Claire

[Daniel Dawes]

Cool, that's what I aim for. Thanks for your nice comment :) Dan

[Tina Louise UK]

I like this one...life is like a motion picture, good one :) x

[Daniel Dawes]

Thanks for the review :-)