So Forgetful...

The little faith in me you have left,

something so wretched, something to detest.

Such horrors I cannot express,

but from me, what else do you expect?

Am I special? And only to you?

And trust in me, you try to renew?

It is broken easily, so fragile,

nothing worth saving, nothing worthwhile.

You say that I lie, claim hypocrisy,

say I deceive like aristocracy.

But such is not, you’re unaware

that I just simply do not care.

Stop complaining and just give in,

forget me, and let your life begin.

Reviews

[Tony Williams]

It is refreshing to see a poem about something maybe a little more rare than the standard issue love poem or emo poem. It represents a real but often ignored aspect.

[BeccaBelieved-]

As usual, very well written, Luke. I shall try at yet another failed review, but I hope this will help you keep writing :)

Sometimes the best way for people who no longer love us is to just tell them to forget about us, however hard that may be. I can see that, maybe, bein the inspiration for this poem. It flows easily, and the message is clear. It paints a wonderful, yet sad, picture in my mind as I read these words.

Very well done :) I loved it!!

- Becca

[Joel M Frye]

Powerful write, Luke. Small distraction in line 11, where context would suggest "you're" instead of "you've". Nice touch with the visual rhyme of "fragile" and "worthwhile". Well done.

[Jibin]

Nice write, and i felt it quiet dark (in my view).
and the ending is so powerful.

[Lily Mae]

Interesting write.. You've have penned those emotions well. "Forget me, and let your life begin". It makes me wonder who's life it really is going to free...there's or yours? :) xx Great write..x

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting request in the poem. Sometime hard to forgive people for what they done. I like the desire of being allow in again. Sometime the door is locked forever when the deeds left the heart to bleed. A excellent poem.
Coyote