Ghost

This is a song that I wrote, I hope you enjoy

I’m back on your stage at your request,

while I’m in a state of distress.

Your voice you made me listen to,

as I was your audience; the only one to watch you.

You played out your favorite parts

sown up from pieces of your own heart.

The entertainment wore thin,

as I wanted to go, you made me grin.

 

No, you’re not my life,

and no, you won’t have any part of it.

No, you’re not in my dreams at night,

at the best sign, you’re just a spur of bliss.

 

I sat down on your piano bench,

it’s the only thing I did to make sense.

You played some song that meant much to you,

and I didn’t care if you’d be someone I lose.

As we sat there I improvised,

the best parts of the song, which were never right.

We tried to sing over the melody,

but all that resulted was no harmony.

 

No, you’re not my life,

and no, you won’t have any part of it.

No, you’re not in my dreams at night,

at the best sign, you’re just a spur of bliss.

 

It’s been long since you played such a show.

Such fond memories from long ago.

Even if it’s been a while,

those still frames in time make me smile.

So I tried to look for you,

as to your whereabouts, there were no clues.

But the day I looked for you, your friend thought I should’ve known,

that after I left you, you became a ghost.

Reviews

[Saraplenty]

This got me from the first two lines.

Very beautiful, and it has me searching for a melody.

[Ryker Killian]

Your words dance in cryptic messages.

Really well written

Amazing, work

[A]

This lyrics is just amazing, I'm sure it'll be an awesome hit, the flow is good,
my favorite thing about it is it's beautiful meaning.
Nice job.

[EDRC]

Beautifully written! :D

[Andy Ruffett]

I'd like to hear the recording if you have one. Don't know if you can post recordings on Writer's Cafe. I like the title and the word "ghost" really tells the story. What I'd like to know is what does the word "ghost" in the poem really mean to you? Is it haunting that she's gone, it doesn't seem to be, or is it that she just disappeared? Gone. Nothing inside. Curious.

[New Beginnings]

I like the power and confidence that is emitted from this song. The subject is self-assured from the beginning. Awesome descriptive piece! NB

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

WOW!
I love it :D
Very good job!
I love the emotion in it :)

100/100

[Madison A. Wright]

very nice lyrics.. Wish i were able to hear it.. music speaks many words and hearing the emotion as you sing would probably be better than reading them. very strong and emotional lyrics..

[Brad]

bluesy, with a nice scent of whiskey in the back

[BeccaBelieved-]

As usual, a job well done. I'm not exactly sure if I can truly describe what I think of it with my words justifying your poem. I really wish there wasva way to describe, but there isn't. Anyway; well done!!

- Becca