Meaningfull

Let this be meaningful when I’m lost here,

when I cannot find anything but fear.

When these roads offer nothing but more pain,

not just from the tarmac, but the bullet-rain.

Let this be meaningful when I find no comfort in her,

even when she speaks, she finds the right words.

But I want her as a lover, not just a friend,

for love is the only thing to cure my end.

Let this be meaningful when I cry out my eyes,

when I need people the most, they only say goodbye.

It’s this loneliness I feel, but it’s something she can cure,

I hope she knows this, but I can’t be sure.

Let this be meaningful the moment I break,

at that moment, no more suffering will I take.

I will fall down with one final stride,

and collapse with all the other who’ve previously died.

But let me mean something for this moment again,

because again will never come if we find out I’m dead.

Reviews

[Just Brooke]

This is very poetic, romantic, fascinating. It has kind of a Romeo and Juliet vibe yet at the same time an "I love her but she loves me not." It's really quite sad in it's depth. And a very meaningful poem. I like how you didn't use stanzas and how your rhymes were put together. You are truly talented.

[Cheryl J. Turner]

This is so beautifully romantic and painfully sad.
You have a magic for sculpting emotion.

[Madison A. Wright]

very nice poem filled with emotion and written from the heart! the flow moves nicely

[akapr17other]

Ugh the friend zone. Hate it. But good poem.

[Spiceyyy]

I really enjoyed reading this and loved how you repeated the line "let it be meaningful"
as i read this poem i felt how you describe your feelings
i look forward to reading more :)

[A]

I loved repeating the " Let it be meaningful line" it helped making the poem deeply meaningful and well described... I admired the rhyming, good job.

[EDRC]

This is a very meaningful poem, and it has a very nice pattern to it.

[Aisha]

Like the name says... this poem is meaningful. You did a very nice job with the way the words sound when they're spoke aloud (at least in my head). The poem follows a road from fear to death, and you do it seamlessly. Good job, and keep writing. =)

[Denise]

My favorite aspect of this poem is the repetition of the line "Let this be meaningful" and then when the poem came to an end you finished with "But let me mean something for this moment again." Wonderful flow and great conclusion!

[New Beginnings]

Wonderful rhythm and rhyme combination and well, thought-out work. The main idea of the poem is constant. Excellent!