Blind Spiral

Amongst the blackened trail,

In pondering days gone by;  

Sitting on its remains,

I found the reason you cry.

 

I lit the path with thoughts,

Different from those before;

As I waited for you to find us,

You stood listening at the door. 

 

You heard my wordy silence,

In hesitation, you lost my mind;

Now I spiral forever downward,

Waiting; wanting;

Blind.   

Reviews

[JadedSparrow]

"Now I spiral forever downward
Waiting; wanting;
Blind."

These lines sang to my soul. I have twisted and turned in this downward spiral of which you speak for such a long time... It is always a pleasure to read your work, but this piece is one of my favorites that you've written. Kudos

[Ang]

Love this! I read it a few times. I like that you don't give away to much in this poem. It creates a sense of mystery which, to me at least, is very captivating. Great poem! :)

[Kelley]

This was great Danielle ! I loved how it ended too.
Kind of sad but it was a great poem.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley Enzo

[Arthur Crow]

I agree with Sue - very profound, the emotion is so strong yet the poem blooms with beautifully constructed lines. Really feeling it here Dani, endless depths..
a great deal to ponder.

[Ladysue]

Dani, this is fantastic and profound. It has much truth. Well presented...Great work...

[TamiViolet]

Great writing, Dani.

'I found the reason you cry.'...

This line is full of intensity and depth....

You do such contrasting work in 'my wordy silence'... True and deep.

[deeps]

Faith can be blinding even the strongest of faith.
I really like this write. It's open and sincere.
It's also quite insightful in a way. This is a very
well written write as well.