Pens For Peace

For the PENS FOR PEACE Group

PENS FOR PEACE

 

Poets, writers, friends,

Enlighten them of the suffering. 

Never ceasing pens bring forth

Silent voices to be heard. 

 

Forgotten children are dying;

Overwrought parents are crying;

Resolution hasn't occurred. 

 

Poverty is starving them;   

Echoes of war scream within; 

Abuse hidden without words.

Crying infants without a choice,

Eased only by our voice.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Okay, I'm in the editing process now... will post the changes soon. Thank you Bhavya, I agree w/ your suggestion...

Reviews

[Seriana]

Girl, this is most fabulous. Such a subtle, soft voice, yet so powerful. I actually got chills. I heard a song just yesterday (or read a new article or something, I cannot remember), but it was talking about some of these very things. How true it is that they depend on our voices, yet may never even know that we've helped them.
Nice acrostic, too. :) It's good to see something from you again, my dear. :)

[Aspiring Angel]

Hi Dani,

I hope that you did not think I had forgotten you. Been on a self imposed computer restriction to try to get caught up a little in the real world. I loved this write as all I have read that is yours. A great write for the group.

Blessings,
Lesa

[LlamaLord]

Very nice. You really grasped my attention with this. These are huge issues our world is facing right now. Writers truly can make a difference!

-Austin

[Ralphy]

I like this very much, I meant to review it when Tim sent it to me but I'm not sure why I didn't respond cause I read it more than 10 times. I'm not a critic of writing, and only will be if asked, normally I'll just say what the writing meant to me when I read it. I listen to all of your reviews and did a little tug of war but I think your writing stands well. If you wanted to change it, I would do what something similar to Bhavya and change ours to "A United Voice" since that is the foundation of the group. But like I said, I only step up when asked otherwise, I'm in my own little world, chasing butterflies�the lady types and drink soda pop�lol

[Angela]

Very powerful acrostic, Dani. I love it and it definitely has a lot to say. As writers, it needs to be a mission to bring all our voices together and pen our shouts against the horrors that are occuring in our world. Excellent work!

[Blue Sky]

A flawless piece Dani,
one that will certainly mark its place in the hearts of those that care
with the will to go unheard...


Never ceasing pens bring forth

Silent voices to be heard.



Wonderful addtion to the group, for all to heed that come upon this...together we make a difference!!

[Dionysus Cain]

i really like this.. it seems political to me and like that.. it is crazy to think that alot of people will never understand the true freedom of what it means to be free. voices speak for others, they listen and watch us, they send us to war and after we die they give no means of support to our families. if all of our silent voices came to gether from a whisper they'd have to listen, it is just messed up to me that most of us our to dumb to realize what is happening right infront of their faces

[The DuchessPoet]

Excellent and very powerful!

Thank you for allowing me to be apart of such a wonderful group.

[Wondering Mind]

A nicely constructed Acrostic which speaks powerfully yet poetically with each line. Perfect for the group.

[R J Askew]

This is my third attempt to comment on your poem. The first comment was emotional and political and a reference to a killing now going on. The second comment was reserved and meaningless. This one is just to say... I dunno. I am personally confused. I think it is essentially a matter of politics not poetics. Ach, I cannot finish this... Personally I don not want to be a politician. Am I washing my hands of crucial world issues? Ach, I want to write...I want to write... Can I save the world? Can I save a life? Have I any influence? I do not know the answers. I have trouble enough writing. Also what political views I have would prove troublesome... Politics, politics, politics.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Yes, this is beautiful.
I'm also a member of "Pens for Peace" since I do believe that together if we try than we can make a difference and your writing has really encouraged and inspired me a lot.
I'm a fan of Acrostics and thus I loved this one too.
But why have you used the word "OURS" in the end?
Either it should be there with the previous line or should be there at all!
I know what you mean to convey by that word and that has been conveyed very well!
But still I guess it should be in continuation with the previous line.