Red Dusk

Red Dusk

A Poem by Dani California

 

  

 

 

Oil paint and fine textured fabric,

strewn in skies of dusk,

veils understanding;

mere sight is relied upon

as faith prays behind the big picture.

 

An illusion of senses create beliefs,

cloaked in flesh and arrogance;

seeing is believing.

Denial holds its cloth in place

as sanity unfolds within complacency.

 

Painted are invisible paths to nowhere,

leaving smudged footprints to follow,

only appearing to be solid;

notions of reality rest within pretense,

as truth stands alone on the other side of dusk.

 

© 2010 Dani California


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Many people see only what they want to see, for them - reality is merely that. For those who think as well as see, it becomes more. This poem suggests just that point, and, you use words to make the reader think, use metaphors to create more than just a single thought...

This is a beautifully crafted piece of writing, font colour so right for the beautiful picture

'An illusion of senses create beliefs, / cloaked in flesh and arrogance; / seeing is believing; ' < , sadly, how true.

Thank you for sharing.



Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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This picture fits this wonderful poem, thanks for sharing.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh, this is such a beauty
to breathe in the vibrant hues
as your words beautiful reveal
this awesome painted words
many wonderful lines that I love
particularly these...

as sanity unfolds within complacency

Painted are invisible paths to nowhere,
leaving smudged footprints to follow

This is just magical that enhances the senses
to this awesome moment, another one to contain with my favs!
You're an awesome writer!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Danni, This is amazing! This must be the "truth" piece you told me you wanted to write.. I love how you your literally paint the picture. Impressive. : ) The truth really does stand alone as I just wrote about that myself.. I think I like how you wrote it better!! I am going to have to learn how to write like this!! Bravo!

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful amd brillant!
You're like fine wine my dear.
You just keep getting better as time passes by!
Truly a great and artistic poem from a bright and wonderful poet!
A very inspiring awesome poem!
For centuries mankind has brought war, plague and injustice on to others for in the name of truth.
Yet, as your poem boldy proclaims that "truth stands alone on the other side of dusk!"
It stands there by the side of the marvelous creator that conceived it all in the first place!
It is there and only there that we will find out who was right and who was wrong. It will be there, where we all will find out what truth really is!
But untill then,we sure as hell, can try to get along in this world and make it a much better place then we found it.
You did that with this great astonishing poem my dear!
Bravo! I loved it!
Always,
TIM

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.





Damn!!! Read some Stephen King Books and see what comes out of you. Wow this is fantastic.

Denial holds its cloth in place
as sanity unfolds within complacency.


Painted are invisible paths to nowhere,
leaving smudged footprints to follow,

You captured us following each others path in some way of another and we find the truth alone on the otherside.

I really enjoyed this poem, as I usually do.



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Red Dusk = Poem of Three great Ps!

'An illusion of senses create beliefs...'

Great P #1. Proverb Line.

Would like to see the interview - maybe it'll add to my impressions, yet the words speak for themselves.
Your poem makes me think of tea leaves in a cup telling mysteries. I guess in this case they would be red leaves = the clouds! And the cup = the sky.
And the mysteries are thoughts to ponder upon.

'Oil paint and fine textured fabric, strewn across skies of dusk...'

Great P # 2. Picturesque Line.

I've never read an expression like that before, only similar, and this is the best - I feel almost petulant, wondering how I've spent years pondering dusk skies without it! Seriously, amazing!
And it completely outshines the picture up there, of course.
I close my eyes and 'see' and 'feel' those words. They're magical.

'...as truth stands alone on the other side of dusk.'

Great P # 3. Perfecting Line.

Wonderful close. Lasting thought, lasting image, last note.

Dani, it''s great! Thank you for sharing....






Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Simply beautiful! The presentation, the stunning sentiments and
painting all combined to make this a truly outstanding poem Dani!

I'm featuring this one at the forum!

Helena :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Danielle this is absolutely fantastic. it gave me shivers, seriously. =]

your choice of words is amazing and this is definitely i very powerful piece that hold a lot of meaning.

"as truth stands alone on the other side of dusk" - that line is even more beautiful than the picture above. AWESOME write.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As always Danni a stunningly beautiful write. You have a way of pulling the reader in and it leaves me wanting more. Brilliant!

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

very well done on this piece... imagery in this was strong ....overall the inspired stephen king had inspired you well ... nice job on this one!!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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