Inside the Box

Inside a wooden box, notes and pictures rest;

the scent of her perfume, remains;

Fading, yellowed letters, project passing years,

as I recall all the memories, they contain;

Fingers trace edges, outside of a photo,

where she smiles forever, once more;

A vase containing flowers, hers and mine,

resides near my small box of “before“; I close my eyes,

as my mind rewinds, to act out this horrible confusion;

Begging me to accept the reality of today, showing me,

it isn’t an illusion;

My sister died on that cold, lonely morning, though I swear    

I can still hear her breathing;   

Perhaps it’s my heart that echoes in my ears, where she now lives,

never receding.  

 

 

Reviews

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Is there any poem that ought not be written? Maybe the word should be shared....?

Fear of impropriety, (hmmm, maybe being misunderstood?) ... I have struggled with this as well.

Sharing memories of someone you love couldn't possibly be exploitation, but rather, liberation and celebration. (contest merely the launching pad, The Cafe mission control 10, 9, 8, 7.....)

I can see the wooden box. Thought I smelled a heavenly fragrance. I hear the letters crinkle as your lonely fingers wander through them like so many times before. Your ritual no longer a lonely eulogy as you set her free and share your love and memories with the world.

This is exquisite

K

[D. Nelson]

this is a very deep and emotional piece. I can never get over how great you are woth flow and metaphor. Really great work. Keep it comin' C-:

[Angel's Lady]

This is stunningly beautiful and I absolutely felt every word.

Fingers trace edges, outside of a photo,
where she smiles forever, once more; -- This is perfectly captured and oh, so true.

Absolutely the most wonderful tribute I have read in a good long while....Great job, Dani...

[Angela]

This is a very special piece Dani, because it does come from your heart. Yes, it is personal, but like you said, it cried out to be written. I know you miss her tons, but she is always there, living inside of you through your memories and love. There is no shame in showing and speaking from your heart. What a wonderful poem and tribute to her. Thanks for sharing.

[Amanda]

what a wonderful and loving tribute to your sister....though she may not be here with you any longer, she will always reside in your heart. she will always be with you. i know that you miss her terribly and maybe it was time to write about it. sharing it with us is a good thing and it helps to remember her the way that she was...memories are important.
a beautiful write, my friend and i hope that you do well in the contest.

Amanda

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is written with so much love and tenderness.
Describing each momento as if I was looking in this special wooden box I am overwhelmed with emotions. This is a beautiful gift that you have written for your sisterand i hope for yourself.
I am sorry for such a great loss

[April Child]

I can so relate to that feeling of 'before' and 'after'. Events happen in our lives and in an instant nothing is ever the same and we are left surfing these waves left in their wake. I'm glad you decided to post this touching piece.

[Marie]

I have a box, but it's not wooden. Great work my friend.

[Wicahpi]

perhaps indeed..and I am sure your sister smiles, too. i do believe we are forever surrounded by our loved ones. I am so glad that you have these treasured momentos to remind you of her. I would indeed guess that you miss her very much. So very sorry for your loss! I also want to commend you on taking the step to share something very emotional with us. you are in good company. though I have not lost my sister, I have lost a husband, three babies and other family members, and friends, too. I think most of us can relate to this kind of tragedy. I do believe it does help to start writing about it. Nice use all all 10 words! Descriptive & Emotional. Good Luck in the contest!!