Pride's Funeral

Was there a shred of truth to the madness? Were the words spoken, though distorted in its portrayal of events, perhaps worthy of listening to on some oblique level? Am I the less than perfect person I have always feared myself to be?  

 

Action and reaction at its base level.  Which came first, the chicken or the egg?

 

Please, point out to me all that is wrong with me so that I may grow, so that I may become the person whom I admire most. But, do it in a civil and forthright manner. Not indirectly direct, or in a hurtful and demeaning way.

 

The problem with becoming the person I admire the most is, it’s difficult to admire anyone when you know that they too, are imperfect. 

  

So, now what? How can I mimic another, if no other is any more worthy than I? Of course, there are those who proclaim to be great. Those who are self appointed judges of character. Those who point fingers in haste, quickly forgetting where that finger has been.

 

Is this not a judgment in itself?  Where does it all begin and end?

  

I want you to tell me when you think that I have done you an injustice, but please, TELL me when that is what you think.  Do not broadcast to the world what “type” you believe me to be, especially when your facts are as clouded as your view.

 

Speculation is not fact by the way. 

 

At what point did we become so prideful?  At what point did we forget to check our own backyards before we started climbing fences? Certainly, this type of fence climbing should be discouraged and frowned upon.

 

At what point did we, mankind, forget how to love one another?  Or did we ever know how?  

 

I want to be the best person that I can be.  And I need you to be the best person that you can be.  Simultaneously.   

 

Pride's funeral. 

 

 

 

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Author's Note

This is a draft. After reading it over, I've decided to work on it more, expand... I'm keeping the piece up. Suggestions (constructive) are welcomed. Thank you.

Reviews

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Hey Dani...
I will try to recreate what I said previously but I am sure it won't be exactly the same...

I am so uncomfortable most of the time with the person that I am... but, I wouldn't want to be anyone else... does that make sense?? It isn't that I feel better than... anyone... just that I am comfortable with the things that I believe... about life, about love, about others... Pride's funeral ... Where is it that pride trips me up?? I don't even know. I guess it means being able to give up so much of yourself... to accept everything about someone else...

I tried once to tell someone about an injustice that I felt they had inflicted upon me... Ohhh my, that did not go well at all... People are so less than... I don't know how to describe the feeling... it is so empty when you look at someone in the eye and see their contempt for you... when all you did was tell them the truth... It is my experience.. that no one wants to hear any truth but their own... time and time again... in every relationship... I guess the grace of life is in being able to accept the fact that most people will not ever really see who you really are... and be able to love everything about you... so true... that is what it means to relate... I guess you have to be willing to give up so much of yourself... I know people will vehemently disagree ... but I wonder if they are in a relationship??? If so, I wonder if the one they love has to give up so much of themselves as the purchase price of that love??? I talk too much... so unconstructively... I love your work Dani... Thank you..........

[Lalli]

dani have certainly written a poem here that is different beyond any i've read from you yet.
annnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnddd.... I LIKE IT! lol

i think the emphasized lines work and bring the poem together pefrectlty, they are certianly words of wisdom that create great contemplation

I truly loved the ending as well, finished strong, with everyone trying to be the best they can be si multaneously. If only this were possible. but we can keep hoping, for the day prides funeral arrives... it'll be much more like a party!

hahaha, i see what you meant that you've been working on a poem about a simliar topic, but u sold yourself short, and i think that the poem is amazing, its simply 2 different styles darling. I

I'm glad i got to start my day off with this, thank you! Let me know when the completed version is up, i wanna see what changes you made

much love n respect

-Lalli

[Justin Tobey]

Extraordinary, Dani. You've really outdone yourself here.

It's true that judgements and hypocrisy are forever going in a cycle. And you made a good point here; when we call someone else judgemental, we're judging them as that. It really never stops. I'm going through the same thing right now, where I'm always seeing other people and thinking "Man, I'm going to be like that some day." But really we're all imperfect. Perhaps others have traits that we would like to have, but I'm sure that each of us has a trait that another wants. Nobody is perfect, and only the truly foolish believe themselves to be. People have always tried to be perfect, and I think it's wonderful that you want to be a better person, but don't be too hard on yourself when you realize that you're not. It's a lesson I'm still learning. Thank you for sharing this wonderful, enlightening piece. :)

[Haruki]

"At what point did we, mankind, forget how to love one another? Or did we ever know how? "...I ask myself this question daily. Great writing! And I could not agree more. Pride will surely destroy us.

[T]

"Those who are self appointed judges of character. Those who point fingers in haste, quickly forgetting where that finger has been." How true this verse rings ...

A truly thought provoking write for me at 6am, D! lol
Wonderfully written ...

Hugs,
T

[Mr. Lopez]

I think that the self centeredness of most people prevents them from stepping outside of their own image of what love is ,long enough to see that they know not what love is at all. There in comes pride. We appoint judges, in a court of law, to place judgement over others .Then don't allow them to see the whole truth behind the actions of those being judged hence warping their judgement. Is this justice? While others ,who don't have the right, place judgement using "clouded truth"( i loved that line ). True love in a human being is knowing that we will make mistakes, sometimes huge ones, yet still loving each other and ourselves dispite our defects and bad decisions. Boy have you struck a chord in me with this piece !! What i most like about this piece is the depth of thought that it provokes. I love that your work generates this kind of thought out of myself and other readers.this, i believe ,is your gift..your talent.You challenge your readers , with the title alone, to put aside their pride for once and take a long hard look at themselves befor placing judgement on others . Clearing heads and allowing love to bloom into the beautiful gift from God that it is. I could go on and on about this write but mostly want to include that this is a most powerful piece of work from you. Please let me know if and when you revise this as i may leave yet another piece of my mind. An absolute favorite.

Peace

Mr. Lopez

[Legion]

A whole plethora of questions and observations. Well done. We have never truly learned to love one another as a whole. That is the failure of man. A fallacy that can not be contradicted though we may try. Good write D. Probably my favorite of yours. Going in favorites.