Destiny's Dance

This poem was inspired by Michael and his Repeating Quisset formula, which I followed to create it. (see author's note)

 

 

 

Faith laughs taunting fear's phantom.

 

To fly,

Fearless,

In bantam;

 

Strength endures engaging destiny’s dance.

 

In rhythm,

Embracing,

Resolute trance;

 

Hope's cry reflects in bantam.

 

With will,

Conquers,

Fear’s phantom;

 

Dreams unfold arousing magical trance.

 

To become,

Forever,

Destiny’s Dance.

Author's Note

I usually write free form, but am attempting to learn form/patterned writing. With his permission, I wrote this poem using Mike LaSalle's Repeating Quisset formula. It is as follows:

The Repeating Quisset consists of sixteen lines with a 1-2 rhyme.
Written with 8 stanzas, in a 1-3 pattern.
The syllable formula is:
7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4 // 7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4.
With a specific line pattern as follows:
The last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th and 13th line must be A//B//A//B.
Repeating the same rhythm as the last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th,and 13th line,
the 4th, 8th, 12th and 16th line must be A//B//A//B.
The 1st and 4th line must be A//A. The 5th and 8th line must be B//B.
The 9th and 12th line must be A//A.
The 13th and 16th line must be B//B.
With 12 counts, the last word in the 1st line must be the same last word as in the 12th line.
Repeating 12 counts, the last word in the 5th line must match the last word in the 16th line.
Being five counts between the 1st and 5th line, the last word in the 4th line and the 9th line must be the same.
Repeating 5 counts, the last word in the 8th line must be the same as the last word in the 13th line.
With a specific syllable count as follows:
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1

Reviews

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Haha - it is a great and profoundly remarkable poem just as it stands.... and the fact that it met all that extra criteria - well, that makes it an AMAZING profoundly remarkable poem!!!!! I love the word destiny, the idea of destiny and the belief that there is something that is our destiny.....

very cool

Kath

[Mr. Lopez]

Wow , this form sounds like or looks like a form i would get from the IRS. Very difficult challenge that you met so superbly. Your ability to tackle this task with such success is absolutely amazing!! Ask and i shall attempt to snatch the pebble from your hand sensei. Again I am impressed.

Mr. Lopez

[Poetic Injustice]

Holy snap, batwoman. This is kinda like learning a dance. I like it but watch your toes. Is this a copyrighted format by Mike? =0)

[Arthur Henn]

This is amazing, well done and a lot of hard work. I would be pulling my hair out, if I had any to pull out, trying something like this. Your instructions are well written. Thank you for sharing.

The poem is great!!

Art

[BrightEyes]

Dani - this is wondrous! I never can follow strict rules very well...not in poetry or in life - granted I don't try to very hard either lol What you have done with this format is truly amazing...definitely going in my favs!!! whatever hard work you had to put into this - trust me, definitely worth it. :-)

[T]

Your poetry is such a joy to read ... Beautifully written ... hugs

[Michael]

This is a wonderful example of what can be done with some effort. I've heard it said that poetry is prose that demands tempo and you prove that point well. It follows form, has great balance and is a pure joy to read.

Very well done!

[Adela Muresan]

Wow.
Great cadence, great ideas.

*****Poem.

A.M.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Nice Dani, not your usaual, but I understand the need to try and follow rules now and then. It is wonderful to be free and to symbolize it in a dance is true freedom.
Dreams unfold into magical trance.

Intoxicating line.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah