Destiny's Dance

This poem was inspired by Michael and his Repeating Quisset formula, which I followed to create it. (see author's note)

 

 

 

Faith laughs taunting fear's phantom.

 

To fly,

Fearless,

In bantam;

 

Strength endures engaging destiny’s dance.

 

In rhythm,

Embracing,

Resolute trance;

 

Hope's cry reflects in bantam.

 

With will,

Conquers,

Fear’s phantom;

 

Dreams unfold arousing magical trance.

 

To become,

Forever,

Destiny’s Dance.

Author's Note

I usually write free form, but am attempting to learn form/patterned writing. With his permission, I wrote this poem using Mike LaSalle's Repeating Quisset formula. It is as follows:

The Repeating Quisset consists of sixteen lines with a 1-2 rhyme.
Written with 8 stanzas, in a 1-3 pattern.
The syllable formula is:
7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4 // 7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4.
With a specific line pattern as follows:
The last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th and 13th line must be A//B//A//B.
Repeating the same rhythm as the last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th,and 13th line,
the 4th, 8th, 12th and 16th line must be A//B//A//B.
The 1st and 4th line must be A//A. The 5th and 8th line must be B//B.
The 9th and 12th line must be A//A.
The 13th and 16th line must be B//B.
With 12 counts, the last word in the 1st line must be the same last word as in the 12th line.
Repeating 12 counts, the last word in the 5th line must match the last word in the 16th line.
Being five counts between the 1st and 5th line, the last word in the 4th line and the 9th line must be the same.
Repeating 5 counts, the last word in the 8th line must be the same as the last word in the 13th line.
With a specific syllable count as follows:
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1

Reviews

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Haha - it is a great and profoundly remarkable poem just as it stands.... and the fact that it met all that extra criteria - well, that makes it an AMAZING profoundly remarkable poem!!!!! I love the word destiny, the idea of destiny and the belief that there is something that is our destiny.....

very cool

Kath

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful - melancholic yet uplifiting. So dichotomous - just lovely. I really adore this poem. Kudos to you for trying new ways of working. Great rhythm and cadence to this work as well. Thank you for sharing your immense talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[Gandré]

this was terrific rhythm. perfect. I also adored the philosophical meaning.

[faith h.]

I have to say your first line caught my attention!
A wonderful construct, Dani, and I admire anyone who can be disciplined enough to hew to a strict form.

The power behind the form is wonderful and full of resonance.

[RHEA CROSLEY]

Good work. It has a clear beautiful flow. Thanks for sharing.

[disgruntled plumber]

Nice work. I like it.

Disgruntled plumber

[Angela]

As always Dani, this is beautiful. I like the way the poem flows. I have never used a Quisset formula, It really sounds complicated, but you managed to pull it off nicely. Great job!!

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Oh wow, it sounds like the chorus to a really inspiring song. lol! :)

As cheesy as this is gonna sound, this piece sounds very... magical. This is a very intriguing style. Must've been challenging. Thanks for posting this one!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Gabrielle]

I can relate to the struggle with fear's phantom. This poem is a real gem. I think it has no awkward parts to me at all. It does have emotion and intention, like a flute player who plays with true emotion- for no reward other than to express her depth and music, Destiny's Dance is one of these poems that plays with the heart-strings yet doesn't try and yank them out. Peace & keep writing!

Gabrielle

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Whatever the flow . . . I found this to be breathless . . .

yes, you followed the pattern, exactly . . .

but only YOU can breathe the life into the pattern with grace and beauty.

Brava, my friend!

[lauren emily]

This is a wonderful poem, I really enjoyed reading it. I love the message in here..it's so..well-great! haha

Thanks for posting!
Lauren