Destiny's Dance

This poem was inspired by Michael and his Repeating Quisset formula, which I followed to create it. (see author's note)

 

 

 

Faith laughs taunting fear's phantom.

 

To fly,

Fearless,

In bantam;

 

Strength endures engaging destiny’s dance.

 

In rhythm,

Embracing,

Resolute trance;

 

Hope's cry reflects in bantam.

 

With will,

Conquers,

Fear’s phantom;

 

Dreams unfold arousing magical trance.

 

To become,

Forever,

Destiny’s Dance.

Author's Note

I usually write free form, but am attempting to learn form/patterned writing. With his permission, I wrote this poem using Mike LaSalle's Repeating Quisset formula. It is as follows:

The Repeating Quisset consists of sixteen lines with a 1-2 rhyme.
Written with 8 stanzas, in a 1-3 pattern.
The syllable formula is:
7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4 // 7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4.
With a specific line pattern as follows:
The last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th and 13th line must be A//B//A//B.
Repeating the same rhythm as the last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th,and 13th line,
the 4th, 8th, 12th and 16th line must be A//B//A//B.
The 1st and 4th line must be A//A. The 5th and 8th line must be B//B.
The 9th and 12th line must be A//A.
The 13th and 16th line must be B//B.
With 12 counts, the last word in the 1st line must be the same last word as in the 12th line.
Repeating 12 counts, the last word in the 5th line must match the last word in the 16th line.
Being five counts between the 1st and 5th line, the last word in the 4th line and the 9th line must be the same.
Repeating 5 counts, the last word in the 8th line must be the same as the last word in the 13th line.
With a specific syllable count as follows:
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1

Reviews

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

Haha - it is a great and profoundly remarkable poem just as it stands.... and the fact that it met all that extra criteria - well, that makes it an AMAZING profoundly remarkable poem!!!!! I love the word destiny, the idea of destiny and the belief that there is something that is our destiny.....

very cool

Kath

[Blue Sky]

I highly praise you for an outstanding piece
with just perfect words to create Destiny's Dance


Faith laughs taunting fear's phantom.



To fly,

Fearless,

In bantam;


these are great lines to precede each other, you assembled an amazing piece dear!
It's a perfect formula duplicating from Michael's Repeating Quisset with your own choice of word!
Exceptional work!!

[Amanda]

this is an interesting write and conceptual formula...i hope that i can figure it out...lol.

i do like your meaning of it all though...destiny is what we make of it and it becomes a dance as time goes on....really nice, girlfriend :)

A xox

[Phoenix Alleena]

The way that the words flow when you read them
really is amazing. Great Job!

[Katherine Wyatt]

I have worked with this formula and not quite mastered it yet. This poem is amazing andyouhave expressed such beauty and meaning through it! I really enjoyed it!

[Too Me]

I am impressed with the expression of emotions you have used with the "Quisset" formula. I love the truth stated in the last stanza! *Lana* :-)

[ANNA]

I would love to hear you red this one girly. Wow you get better and better each time I read your pieces. Maybe I should try Mike LaSalle's Repeating Quisset formula..haha No I think I could be as good as you. hehe. I love piece. and the style ...Ya you should have this in a book!!
Thank you for sending this one to me. It got my attention for sure. ;)

Much love n respect,
Anna...huggs

[Lestat's daughter]

Very pretty, I like how you set it up.

[Last Lying Look]

I like this poem. It flowed quite well and was attention catching. Good work! :D

[Wildfleour]

Wow - that is a pretty darn intense formula to follow! Bravo to you! With my ADD, I you lost me at the 9th line (smile).

[Justin Tobey]

Wow... It's amazing how much structure goes into poetry, sometimes. I have to say, I think it's wonderful that you did it. I could never have enough patience to figure all that out and still have it sound good, but you've managed to do both here! Excellent work that definitely paid off! :D