Forever

 

Gently

I sink into you

My once strong exterior

Now coddled like a child

Within your arms

Seemingly helpless

I am safe

 

Gradually

My heart quickens

As I feel your essence

Engulfing me

An energy like nothing else

I have ever known

Joy is home 

 

Softly

You touch my cheek

A single stroke of your hand

Sends shivers through my soul

My pulse races

As I try desperately to preserve

This moment

 

Quietly

I weep tears of joy

For the moment that I am in

And I weep tears of sorrow

For the moment that will end

I just want to lay here in your arms

Forever

Reviews

[ElJays Nicholas]

The essence of you shines in this, Dani! It reaches out and embraces us with tenderness and delight. I think, anyone who has experienced such moments can find the beauty in this and can relate to how fleeting such moments can be, and the desire to "stay like this forever." I certainly can relate :) Much love to you, beautiful lady.....

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Tis is a wonderfully expressed and written piece. You captured the essence of the moment of the feeling of security. Like a warm tender blanket that wraps you in a safe place. Brilliant!

[Catrinka]

this is a another great piece Dani! Describes so well for the reader your feelings of the moment - a great capture, an enjoyable read! I see a steady improvement in your writing (the goal of all of us writers)- keep 'em comin'! Very well done indeed!

[Wildfleour]

Ah, to find a safe and sweet harbor with someone..............lovely.

[Brandon M. Whittaker]

My day officially just went from boring to *oggle* *stare* *jaw drops* *dumbfounded*

The entire last stanza just sent my heart leaping. Amazingly beautiful and catching. The overwhelming happiness of the moment one is currently in, and the shattering sorrow when the moment ends. Sometimes what we have at one moment is just so great we want to hold onto it forever, but once that moment breaks, and what we have is gone, it's like the greatest heartbreak you could ever feel.

Beautifully flowing, and outstandingly written. Just the significance and the emotion let off by this poem had me staring at the screen and had my second class hovering over me wondering if I should go to medical! Keep this up and my head my explode!

[RHEA CROSLEY]

What a beautiful moment that gives us a glimpse of eternal security. To be with love in security- there is nothing better. Thanks for the good write.

[forfila]

I know I have read this before and loved it on AF I think? But once more I will say what a pleasure it is to read such adoring and adorable poetry. Well worded and crafted to convey a beautiful message Dani:)
Love it:)

[Poetic Injustice]

I found this almost the perfect combination of erotic and emotional high.Very good this. Very. Beats my downbeat stuff with a bat.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"For the moment that will end
I just want to lay here in your arms
Forever..."
Ahmmmm!! This is so...romantic and so beautiful!
I mean, entire poem has been written very well, but these last lines stand out for me! The way you have captured true emotions and that essence of love in your words is really beautiful.
I loved it Dani, Great write! :)

[Blue Sky]

Such is the words of your piece
flows beautifully with that touch of poignancy
my fav lines

Gradually
My heart quickens
As I feel your essence
Engulfing me
An energy like nothing else

as well...

Softly
You touch my cheek
A single stroke of your hand
Sends shivers through my soul
My pulse races
As I try desperately to preserve
This moment

altogether it's beautiful..touching to the heart!
Very nicely done!!

[Ralphy]

This is a touching sentiment of love, a moment in time that we always want to last forever. You captured that pristine moment in time and shared it with us. You reminded me how eclipsing love is at the moment it ends, it actually begins. Nice write Dani