Evicted

 

 

Love needy...

 

Exploring

Pouring

Out of my soul

Love

All of me

You can have it

Here, hold my world 

I'm only asking 

For true love in return

 

He studied me like a textbook...

 

Seeking love

Finding deception 

Motives

Not governed by love

Steal my kindness

Weakness

Is what you read on its label

A dime a dozen

Is what you paid

 

What he got...

 

Grab my heart

Squeeze it

Until it bleeds

Don’t waste a drop

A never ending supply

Of my painfilled

Bloody tears

Is what you got

To wet your egotistical whistle with

 

Worth the cost ...

 

And it only cost you..

Nothing

You took the

Five finger discount

And I

Like the fool my Father

Didn't raise

Unknowingly relinquished

My unguarded soul

 

Ah, but wait!

The fountain…

That beautiful flowing

Healing fountain!

I must find it

I must …

For if I don’t

I will bleed to death

Internally

Eternally

And the "I" that I am meant to be

Shall perish

Prematurely 

 

…..and I’m not done here yet.

 

I call out to the fountain,

My lovely healing fountain

Oh no…

My voice!!

Where is my voice?!

Can you hear me?!

I scream in silence

 

For years.

 

Head down,

Walking through life 

One day

I stumbled upon a 

Fountain

A beautiful

Clear, pure

Flowing, healing

Fountain

 

And it spoke to me… 

 

“Drink of me,

Or you shall suffer

A spiritual death.  

Your insatiable need to love

And to be loved …

Will be no longer.

Your purpose will be taken

It will spill from you

Causing a flood

And the one who truly needed you

Who is waiting to love you

Will drown.

 

So I drank…

 

The sweetest water I have ever tasted

A cool, clear, loving liquid

Glided down my throat

Into my bosom

My womb

My heart 

Peace,

Strength

LOVE

Not external

Internal…

 

Clarity...

 

Perception

Changed its direction

And found the place

Where true love is conceived

Within

Where it has always been

Waiting  

And now resides  

Eternally

The previous tenant

Was a liar

 

And was evicted.

 

Reviews

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

will bleed to death
Internally
Eternally
And the "I" I am meant to be
Shall perish
Prematurely

Loved the whole poem but the above lines were just exceptional. I think you have reached a new high. The energy in the piece is refreshing. And finding love within, priceless. Good job Dani.

Kim

[bailish]

Wow! Not bad for just happening. The rhythm lulled me to sleep, but those last three lines told me that you're no pushover. You give freely for a while, but if there's no payback, then get out of town, Jack!

Great!

[ABBY]

the poem is really good...............but i dont really get it.....sorry

[Cylis Derrens]

I particuliarly like first few parts. After that I had a bit of trouble following. I'll try to re-read it again later to see if I can understand it better.

[[untitled]]

Oh Lord, this is AMAZING! I can so relate to this piece, that is sends shivers down my spine, friend.

After so many years of searching for external love, I have found the one, true love, that was staring me in the face my entire life.

Me.

"So I drank�

The sweetest water I have ever tasted
A cool, clear, loving liquid
Glided down my throat
Into my bosom
My womb
My heart
Peace,
Strength
LOVE
Not external
Internal�"

You have portrayed the struggle within and without so perfectly.

I stand in awe at your amazing and wonderous talent, Dani.

Perfectly in awe.

[Coffin Joe]

The last few lines kicked the s**t out of me.

However I just cant find myself to enjoy it as much as I would a good book, nothing really moved me.
I received no goosebumps, butterflies. I gave no tears.

[fireblossom]

Beautiful sister. I love the healing. I felt washed. Once I met a fellow who was recovering from Alcoholism. He said there was no way he would give up one single experience of all he had gone through because each experience led him to find spirituality. "How could I break one link from the chain that brought me here?" Very profound.

As a poem it is written with wisdom and lack of malice. I am certain any harsh feelings were washed away with your old Unself :-) I love the flow of this poem and I really liked the "subheadings" as steps.

Peace and love Dani.

Jan

[Antony]

Wow Dani, so powerful a statement you make, very clear with this poem, I like how it moved along, like you couldn't wait to get these thoughts out in the open and say what your heart has been holding inside, it sounds as though you were reborn in the moment. Nice work Dani
Tony

[Edmond Dantes]

wow, what genius, i think this is one poem that i will print & try to memorize, like the olden days! i don't have many other poems besides mine memorized besides some of R. Frost's --Fire & Ice & Nothing gold Can Stay, but if I mastered this--it'd be a worthy accomplishment! kudo's to you.

so many good things in her--i can't just pick anyone, some things I read reminded me of bits & pieces or lines i wrote simliar to yours, or songs/lyrics that were reminded.

[Edmond Dantes]

oh, my goodness!!! half way through, i was so excited & already so many cool/talented things that i was smiling & had to stop & save it to my fav's right away!!!! i'll be right back.

[Robert Luna]

Having read this twice now feeling as my own words were entangled in here some place, some how I found myself drawn to the core of the piece that point in which were realize the ugly face of reality and then trip over the thin line that lies there in between dreams and life to know what it is we thought was truth becomes fictional. I think you painted this thought clearly to the core of my being.


Great JOb!!!!!!!