Your Words

Your Words

A Poem by Dani California

 

 

 

 

Your words

 

Ageless 

Faceless

Captivate me

Entrance me

Imprison my mind

Steal my heart

Hidden meanings

Not really there

Hearing thoughts

Never said

Notions of love

Undefined

Space and time 

Are you really there?

I often wonder

And yet still

I find myself

Addicted

Wanting

Seeking

Craving

Needing

Reading

More of 

 

Your words

© 2008 Dani California


Author's Note

Dani California
Random thought...

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random as these words spill to intirgue
the minds, and so wonderfully mastered


Are you really there?

I often wonder

And yet still

I find myself

Addicted

Wanting

Seeking

Needing

Reading more of



Your words

...excellent piece that just

undefined space and time

altogether, creating a wonderful poem!!
as always charmed by your touch!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Random or not...this was very keenly wrought! I love the way that the words just seem to fall across the page (or screen), like random raindrops that still have a distinct sense of cohesion. Wonderfully written!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel this way about so much of the writing I read here. You captured the thoughts I could not and wrote it down with such beauty. I love to sit here for hours and just read and wonder. This is now a fav. Really great.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great! All the words and phrases that you used were very powerful.
"Are you really there?
I often wonder
And yet still
I find myself
Addicted
Wanting
Seeking
Craving
Needing
Reading
More of

Your words"
Sometimes random thoughts can turn out to be great poems or stories! :)
Awesome work,
~Lauren

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your random thoughts are absolutely profound and beautiful...bring on more randomness my friend!

Love,
Janice

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Hidden meanings
Not really there
Hearing thoughts
Never said
Notions of love
Undefined
Space and time"

These particular lines reached out and grabbed me. It's amazing how much stock and faith "lovers of prose" put into words. It's so easy to mold words, either read or spoken, into what we want to them to be, regardless of the intended meaning. I am so guilty of this. And . . . I completely relate to this poem.

Honest, touching and brave. Powerful and direct. Yet, a distinct gentleness flows through "your words".

All this, and more, makes you the magnificent poetess that you are!



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hmm... this is very interesting. i really like it. you have a great way with words, Danielle.

"Captivate me

Entrance me

Imprison my mind

Steal my heart "

beautiful. =]

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great. I love the way you have captured the emotion of being caught up in someone's writing to the point where you are totally captivated by it to the point where you might imagine a relationship or crave one where there really is none. I can really relate to this and I love it. Wonderful piece of writing!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so within a poem of basiclly 1 to 2 word lines, you keep a consitentcy in subject matter flowing from one line to the next.

snap snap my dear.

notions of love, undefined. amen.

our quest for knowledge, companionship, identfiability, and answers leave me addicted, wanting, seeking, cravining, needing, and reading more of your words.

powerful ending!

much love n respect

-Lalli

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is pure poetry, love the wording and the need! Tom

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful! Words say so much.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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