the colour coding really does something for this poem...can't explain it though :(
this is a lovely succinct piece but the impact is still received in totality. love the technique you've used...its one i haven't seen in a while. refreshing. thanks for sharing...
I enjoyed reading this, though not perhaps in the same manner as some of the other reviewers. If you remove the notions of love, and go with the words - there hidden meanings - how they might twist this and twist that - the subtle subcontext of it all... yes, the mind candy. :) This was great, Dani - thanks.
Oh this was awesome! I just like the way the poems flows. The ending actually gave me a chill from the part 'I find myself' and all the way down was just great and ending with 'your words'. This a new favorite. A good read. I thank you for writing this.
Great structure and flow of verse - that was my thoughts on the first read through. When I read it again, my mind was stimulated into thinking; this is a person seeking spiritual enlightenment. Well, that was my interpretation of the word play.
"Hidden meanings not really there hearing thoughts never said"
This is pure genius!
I love the way every word effortlessly carried the thought, how the imagery painted clear pictures, and also how the descriptiveness gave a "random thought" personality...
This is now a favorite of mine.
-Marv
Random or not this was simply brilliant! These thoughts just flowed perfectly as our eyes glides down your words as we experience with you those emotions which he stirs deep inside of you!
A Noiseless Patient Spiderby Walt Whitman
A noiseless patient spider,
I mark'd where on a little promontory it stood isolated,
Mark'd how to explore the vacant vast surrounding,
It launch'd fort.. more..