A Moment

 

 

 

My heart aches

For a moment

 

A moment 

A mere flicker

In this vastness

Of endless time

 

A moment

To know you

To touch you

To feel you

 

A moment

To see the twinkle

Of love in your eyes

When you look at me

 

A moment

To feel the softness

Of your lips

Pressed gently against mine

 

A moment

To hear your heart

Softly beating love's melody

As it intertwines with my own

 

A moment

To spend a sprinkle

Of eternity

In your arms

 

A moment

When everything

That ever existed

Finally makes sense

 

A moment

When passing stardust

Erases all time

Past, present and future

 

A moment

When the only thing left

And the only thing

That ever truly mattered

 

Was this moment

 

Reviews

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

this was amazing!! it was romantic and heart warming at the same time!!! things can change in just one moment, or you can be filled with more passion than imaginable. This was just so touching...

A moment
When the only thing left
And the only thing
That ever truly mattered

Was this moment

that was when i felt like i was in the moment the most...it started good and ended great!!!!

keep writing!!

~may

[DaniElle LaPointe]

Your line placement allows for breaths inbetween... which nicely conveys a beat like the rythym of a heart. Eloquent.

[robin]

My heart aches
For a moment

These were my favorite lines, from them the rest of this just flowed in sensual bliss. Awesome!

[The Autumn Faerie]

This is... absolutely beautiful...

I think we spend our whole lives searching for such a moment...
I know I have.

[Windy]

A beautifully written, poem. Your wording was...perfect. You can feel this piece (if youv'e ever had or want) real, true love. You reminded me of something I had forgotten. Thank you. Windy

[Kayla]

This emotion is so clear through your writing that I can feel the love and happiness. I have heard such good reviews of your work and all of they excellently recommended you they were correct. I was such a joy to read your poems and I hope some day my poems can reach someone the way yours reached me. This is so wonderful and I will defiently be reading more of your work.

[Cylis Derrens]

I totally agree with this. So many of us would give almost anything for that real moment. It doesn't have to be an eternity,but we still want to feel it. Sometimes we come so close, and miss the chance when it is gone.

[Justin Tobey]

I completely agree that a single, magical moment can last for eternity and have infinite levels of depth, meaning, and emotion. I really love this poem and the idea it stands for; I particularly like this stanza:

A moment
When passing stardust
Erases all time
Past, present and future.

:D

[Poetic Injustice]

Fellow hopeful romantic. Hope springs eternal (an overused quote I admit). Moments last a millisecond. Moments last forever. We seek another, remembering the last. May we all receive our due. As for this piece, thank you.

[Blue Sky]

That perfect moment etched so profoundly
this is just wonderfully written
I found self endeared into my own
with your wonderful work,

A moment

To spend a sprinkle

Of eternity

In your arms


I really like the thought of that striking line...
altogether creating a fantastic piece!
Such a wonderful poem!!

A moment
When the only thing left
And the only thing
That ever truly mattered

Was this moment

- Powerful lines indeed

In poetry, each word is felt, which creates powerful imagery. for example, for flying, an evening and dark ambient word would probably be hover. While a more morning, graceful and glorifying equivalent might be glide. These are essential in keeping the overall color, culture, and theme of the poem consistent with the message, mood, and character of the poem.

You have done this well here. Aside from very good form and well imparted message, you have also chosen your words well, thus, also painting the imagery very well.

A very good piece.

I think (I am doing this in some poems) , you can add an initial comment suggesting which song best suits the poem. For some pieces, it helps, especially if it was the same song you were listening to that inspired you to write that piece :)