CRAYONS

 

 

 

I picked up a crayon

And scribbled a bit

This blank piece of paper

Had new purpose to it 

 

I picked up another

And scribbled some more 

Its meaning grew deeper 

So the more I explored  

 

I continued through the box

Picking one crayon at a time

Then adding more color

To this masterpiece of mine

 

A pinch of blue

A dabble of green

I litte bit of red

Every color was seen

 

Each and every color

Gently blended and entwined

Painted the color of love

On the hearts

 

Of mankind

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

yes this is nice ,as i see it ,writing adds a color with each word you say until at the end with so many words there is a great writing imaging a very nice cored peace of imagination ,with the words or the color blending so nicely to put out a great piece as if you have just finished a painting rather than a drawing ,very nice ly done

[Pj]

This is wonderful! A brilliant extended metaphor...so much depth in a simple image explored!
A fantastic piece!

[Michael X]

Seeing in color's seeing in full spectrum
looking at things from all sides..at once?
when substance finds meaning in simplicity
defining details by dividing strengh-will
is being able to grasp understanding
at sustainable depth..finding knowledge
through ambition..fundamental purpose
dani.. you characterize definition

"Each and every color

Gently blended and entwined

Painted the color of love

On the hearts



Of mankind

[Poetic Injustice]

So nice. I, too, get a pleasant elementary environment feel to this. It would look good hanging on the wall in a classroom. Crayola should use your piece to market. Even at a rather small amount of royalties it would be worth the recognition. That's my dark side butting in. My fluffy side likes it, too.

The song "Fields of Gold" by sting was playing inside my head even before I saw your poem, it still fit appropriately :)

This poem is very good, you can choose to suggest a song that would fit in with this piece :) The effect will multiply easily :)

Good form, good format, good choice of words, well imparted message

A very good piece

[Cylis Derrens]

I love this poem it seems to possess a child-like wonder. It reminds me of preschool, and I love working with kids. They have the coolest way of looking at the world.

[[untitled]]

aw this is wonderful. I love the word usage and the rhyming. Very creative piece!

[jen -- JG]

A rainbow of coloured words to bring joy and happiness to all who see.

Well done Dani - well done tis a joy to see and read.

jen

[Angel's Lady]

Well, just how dang beautiful was this! Amazing. Simply stated and beautifully done! Great job!

[KieraCrimeScene]

m.

I like this one. Its just happy. and fun. This is alot different from the ones that you usally post. and i like it.

=]

[TL Boehm]

Ah this is a nice one. simply stated, well presented - poems dont' have to rip your heart out and stomp your intestines to make a point. This one makes its point, gently.