yes this is nice ,as i see it ,writing adds a color with each word you say until at the end with so many words there is a great writing imaging a very nice cored peace of imagination ,with the words or the color blending so nicely to put out a great piece as if you have just finished a painting rather than a drawing ,very nice ly done
wow...i loved the way you started the poem n ended it on such a beautiful note...superb....its like your words too added colours to a blank n dull day!!
Very sweet and gentle poem. I enjoy the comfort the colors and images give me; it makes me feel like a child again, and yet, at the end, like such an adult to understand the concept you're reaching at. "Of mankind" seems to convey that feeling best- you've brought what's maybe a bit more complex of a thought into normal, adult colors.
the colors added that little umph to the poem. It made me want to lay on the floor with crayons and paper in hand and color until my hands hurt. Lol i loved it it appealed to my inner child.
Delicate and beautiful...just like a drawing. I really like the way that this poem reads...such great meter and tone, and the colors are a nice touch as well. I like the last four lines the best...nicely done!
simple, in the fact that the reader associates crayons with children. BUT, there is complexity also. A deeper, hidden meaning. I got a bit "religious" when reading this: I thought of "The Creation" when reading this. You know, the whole bit: "a blank piece of paper"= in the beginning all was dark ...and God created land to divide the endless sea, light to divide the endless darkness,
It seems as though poetry like this comes easily to you ( those poems that seem so simple at first, but upon 2nd and 3rd readings just a wealth of meaning) you are quite talented!
A Noiseless Patient Spiderby Walt Whitman
A noiseless patient spider,
I mark'd where on a little promontory it stood isolated,
Mark'd how to explore the vacant vast surrounding,
It launch'd fort.. more..