Secret Admirer

 

 

 

I try to hide, though he finds a way

My admirer said I was bad today.

He’s hiding somewhere, I can feel him near

My heart is racing, I’m frozen with fear.

He knows where I am, he knows what I do

He writes to me and says, “I’m watching you”.

He sends me flowers, yet they are dead

He tells me he loves me; is he under my bed?

I feel his presence, at work and at home

I know he is watching, I'm never alone.

What does he want, why is he here?

Chills climb my spine, I know he is near.

I call on my friend, I ask him to stay

I don’t want to be here alone today.

We talk, we laugh, though I still sense danger

My life in the hands of a psychotic stranger.

I look at my friend, his expression has changed

His face now distorted, a little deranged.

His words are familiar, his stare hard and cold

I cannot remember, was it him that I told?

My eyes scan the room, I must escape

How could this be?  I thought he was safe!

I run for the door, he's right behind me

I fumble with the door knob…..

 

Oh god where’s the key?!

 

 

 

Author's Note

Just trying something a little different... it's fictional.. lol

Reviews

[brita]

I absolutely loved this. The flow of the whole poem was awesome. My adrenaline was pumping as I kept on reading, wanting so much to figure out what would happen next. I love the ending as well. Cliff-hangers are my favorite. Great job on this one!
I recomend you start writing more horror. It's so fun and I think it'll work well for you!

[Dawn Jones]

definately high on the creep factor. Nice job with the rhyming. Well written.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You certainly display how creepy it is to have someone who is fixated on you to the point you feel almost trapped in a box... your words are masterful and terrifing.... great work babe.

[Catrinka]

Oh, I like this one! Dark, intense, scary! I always like when the ending takes you by surprise, which this one did - not a happy ending here! Good job!

[Forest Green]

It's quite different but certainly has a nice tension to it. Well done from the very start. I hope it's not real...we've all felt that way to some degree. Reminds me of the movie 'Sleeping With The Enemy'.

Fast paced and well-rhymed.

Good work.

Daniel