Secret Admirer

 

 

 

I try to hide, though he finds a way

My admirer said I was bad today.

He’s hiding somewhere, I can feel him near

My heart is racing, I’m frozen with fear.

He knows where I am, he knows what I do

He writes to me and says, “I’m watching you”.

He sends me flowers, yet they are dead

He tells me he loves me; is he under my bed?

I feel his presence, at work and at home

I know he is watching, I'm never alone.

What does he want, why is he here?

Chills climb my spine, I know he is near.

I call on my friend, I ask him to stay

I don’t want to be here alone today.

We talk, we laugh, though I still sense danger

My life in the hands of a psychotic stranger.

I look at my friend, his expression has changed

His face now distorted, a little deranged.

His words are familiar, his stare hard and cold

I cannot remember, was it him that I told?

My eyes scan the room, I must escape

How could this be?  I thought he was safe!

I run for the door, he's right behind me

I fumble with the door knob…..

 

Oh god where’s the key?!

 

 

 

Author's Note

Just trying something a little different... it's fictional.. lol

Reviews

[brita]

I absolutely loved this. The flow of the whole poem was awesome. My adrenaline was pumping as I kept on reading, wanting so much to figure out what would happen next. I love the ending as well. Cliff-hangers are my favorite. Great job on this one!
I recomend you start writing more horror. It's so fun and I think it'll work well for you!

[Tiana]

I woke up in a weird mood, jittery and your poem just made me even more nervous! LOL This is a chilling write. I wrote a couple of poems similar to this. Isn't it such an eerie feeling?! EEEK! OK, you got me all wired up girl. lol later hun!

[PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALI..]

What a great and awesome poem from my favorite and brilliant poet in the world!
You totally captivated our attention with this one honey!
Kind of like a scene from when a stranger calls!
Well my crystal ball see's you writing horror screenplays in the near future!
Move over Poe, Danicalifornia is arriving on the scene!
Another great and brilliant write girl!
Keep wring from your soul,
for the good of all souls!
Awesome!
TIM

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I loved this Dani , now you made me a problem on my contest !! ... what to choose lol Yossi

[Blue Sky]

For something different, it's most excellent
superbly written right to the tee!
I just get right in there, draws the reader
right in there with all the emotions reeling so real!
A really great piece by you, Dani! :))

[Spat Queen]

This certainly is creepy. It never ceases to baffle me the way people have an affection for the element of fear and danger. I think people allow themselves to become even more spooked than they might otherwise be without this affection, would you agree? Great piece. It is not to say that there isn't a real danger in the world but I think that actually speaks more for my point.

[T]

You had my heart racing, D! This is a reality for so many unfortunately. Wow girl, got me all paranoid! ;)
Happy Aloha Friday!
Hugs
T

[Angel's Lady]

Whew! Scared the heck out of me! Dang. Now, I think he's here somewhere! Dang it. Great write, hon!

[Ralphy]

Oh this is great. I like the approach and how you expressed your concern, how you kept the point flowing and the rthym on key. But Dani, you know me I like to keep the suspense to the very end...but you got me with the key. Great write

[ElJays Nicholas]

Oh My!! It's actually true for many people. The last three girlfriends I met began as online relationships. The relationships themselves, when you include the "getting-to-know-each-other" time online adds up quite extensively. It's a scary thing to meet them!! You don't know who you're going to meet really, because it's so easy to misrepresent yourself online, even if you didn't intend to......

[Legion]

Well isn't this a bit twisted. :) I like it. Hitchcock would be proud.