Take Me There

Take Me There

A Poem by Dani California

Take me to that place
Where everything is exactly as it seems
Where reality is planted in the soil of souls
Where fantasies exist beyond dreams.

Take me to that place
Where hate has no place to to call home
Where poverty is a word without basis
Where loneliness is a stranger who is always alone.

Take me to that place
Where trust can never be broken
Where love is exactly what it says it is
Where joy speaks without a word spoken.

Take me to that place
Where emptiness is never a state of mind
Where hopelessness can only exist yesterday
Where fear runs away leaving courage behind.

Take me to that place
Oh please help me find it somehow
For my mind is growing cold and weary
From living in the now. 
 

© 2008 Dani California


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snap snap...

yes please take me there!

The line about lonliness being a stranger always alone.. absolutely genius.

Dani, you spark a flame of hope here... yes there is the frustration felt.. but hope of hearing such good things, that they can be. Since we grow so tired of the redundance of our lives, the constatn battle to make 2 steps only to be taken back 1.

keep at it girl!... because soon you will be able to enjoy. I'm glad i got to read it.. i was havn a hard day and was actually thinkin about this exact topic! TIME TO CHANGE MY DAY, and make it a positive one


much love n respect

-Lalli

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Absalutly beautiful I love it

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

"Take me to that place
Oh please help me find it somehow
For my mind is growing cold and weary
From living in the now."

The past is passed and the future is unknown.
That place, you seek, is "here" (somewhere) in the, now.
It's deep inside each and everyone of us.
That doesn't mean that each of us will find it though.
Thinking about it, and expressing it are the first two steps
to discovery, so don't ever give up. The next step though,
is a little steeper. You might want to bring some rope.

Great job here Dani!
You'r the raisin in my bread!

Rich





Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is so beautiful Dani...
What a great and brilliant imagery! Also, the flow is quite appealing..
Great write, It also reminds me of that song "Let me take you there" by Plain white T's
Awesome work! :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Can I come with ? Will you send me an invitation with directions when you get there ? I thought that your writing style for this was very dreamy. Like a fantasy......like this place....
I love everything that you write and have a hard time giving you a bad review. From the first stanza i was hooked into your dream of a perfect world. Oh how i wish.... right along with you.

Take me to that place
Where trust can never be broken
Where love is exactly what it says it is
Where joy speaks without a word spoken.

Loved this very much !!!!


Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is lovely Dani. How we wish sometimes that we could be transported to another time and place where none of our current worries exist. Such raw emotion. Thanks for the read!

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

You got some really quality line in this piece. I just love it. I want to go to this place, it's so inviting. You got the stuff girl. Kim

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very ideal and Utopian :)

It is something we all crave for, and something I believe we all have a right to as well :)

Good form, good choice of words, good rhythm, very well imparted message.

A very good piece

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Yes! Can I come too? LOL...this is cool, Dani, I really liked how you put it together :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

snap snap...

yes please take me there!

The line about lonliness being a stranger always alone.. absolutely genius.

Dani, you spark a flame of hope here... yes there is the frustration felt.. but hope of hearing such good things, that they can be. Since we grow so tired of the redundance of our lives, the constatn battle to make 2 steps only to be taken back 1.

keep at it girl!... because soon you will be able to enjoy. I'm glad i got to read it.. i was havn a hard day and was actually thinkin about this exact topic! TIME TO CHANGE MY DAY, and make it a positive one


much love n respect

-Lalli

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

When you find that place, save me a spot!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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