Take me to that place
Where everything is exactly as it seems
Where reality is planted in the soil of souls
Where fantasies exist beyond dreams.
Take me to that place
Where hate has no place to to call home
Where poverty is a word without basis
Where loneliness is a stranger who is always alone.
Take me to that place
Where trust can never be broken
Where love is exactly what it says it is
Where joy speaks without a word spoken.
Take me to that place
Where emptiness is never a state of mind
Where hopelessness can only exist yesterday
Where fear runs away leaving courage behind.
Take me to that place
Oh please help me find it somehow
For my mind is growing cold and weary
From living in the now.
The line about lonliness being a stranger always alone.. absolutely genius.
Dani, you spark a flame of hope here... yes there is the frustration felt.. but hope of hearing such good things, that they can be. Since we grow so tired of the redundance of our lives, the constatn battle to make 2 steps only to be taken back 1.
keep at it girl!... because soon you will be able to enjoy. I'm glad i got to read it.. i was havn a hard day and was actually thinkin about this exact topic! TIME TO CHANGE MY DAY, and make it a positive one
to wish for a perfect place to be is nice....if it can only true. but remember, Dani, there is always a perfect place in our hearts and minds, one that we can excape to anytime we want to.....the seeds of phoenix can make it happen as well.....one can only hope.
The perfect world - a pefect dream - a perfect place to be.
The images your words invoke are beautiful, peaceful and give hope that somewhere exists this utopia we all wish to find.
When the cold reality of life gets us down, it is nice to know that somewhere over some rainbow exists a perfect place where everyone lives in harmony.
OH MY GOSH!!!
So that's how you describe a perfect world....
And that's how you write a perfect poem...
One of the best poems I've read here. It talks so vividly about a place where everyone wants to be. Thanks to your skills, all the readers just had their moment in that world. I'll read a few more times so that I can enjoy this world a bit more.
I loved this!! This is excellent. Outstanding!!
The flow is so peaceful, the lines so beautiful...
The idea so pure, this one's the best for sure...
There, I creates a couplet for you....^_^
Keep Writing!! Especially coz' your friends need to be more frequent to such beautiful places....
ONE OF THE BEST WORKS I EVER READ!!!
AWESOME!!!
OMG, this is breathtakingly beautiful Dani. Don't we all want to go to THAT place you write about. Your choice of words in this piece are to perfection-The rhythm, the rhyme, the flow....Magnificent. What a gift that you have, lady. Thank you for gracing the Cafe with such beauty...For me, it is a glimpse of HEAVEN you speak of. This one rates 100%! Your best yet... Thank you!!! Carole
Were you watching Wizard of Oz before you wrote this? Because I do believe Dorothy was looking for the same place! But, as I recall, she decided that "Happiness is only as far as your own backyard".
Great write! Very poetically written...very beautiful, too.
Hey when you get there will you send my a post card with direction I would love to go there as well. Sounds like a modern garden of eden. You have a way of capture our hopes and own desires as a reader and alluring us in to nodding our head in agreement as we would all love to find this place. But i can't help to think if we all feel this way about looking for this idea place, then way can't we work on turning the here and now into this place we all seek. I just wonder.
Beauty within your words. Spoken is they you put on here. Wonderful how you made me day and many another on here. Thank you for letting me read this. Your words heal my day! Thank you
If you find it let me know. A wonderful write very powerful...many people search for such a place an idea worls in which to live free from prejudice and poverty. A wonderful piece.
A Noiseless Patient Spiderby Walt Whitman
A noiseless patient spider,
I mark'd where on a little promontory it stood isolated,
Mark'd how to explore the vacant vast surrounding,
It launch'd fort.. more..