Sweet Lunacy

I blame the sugar.

She lays in bed

Her hair a rich sea

Of creamy dark waves

 Her sight glazed and free

Milky is her skin

Lush becomes her complexion 

Dark is the flavor on her tongue

Savoring this sweet infection

Sinful are her thoughts

Delicious are her sighs

A luxury in her palm

Decadence in her eyes

Ignored are the warnings

To leave this fantasy

It's far too seductive

This chocolate-laced ecstasy.

 

Author's Note

Yummy. =]

I only changed one thing. To be honest, I wrote this very late at night and really wasn't expecting that much from it.

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

I enjoyed it, especially the chocolate within the lines. I love chocolate myself. Great write!

[Jonathan Ballam]

Ok I enjoyed it up until the last line which threw the rhyme somewhat.

Rhyming is overrated in poetry I feel. Although, you handled it well here...try to sculpt a good image before you try rhyming about it. Think of rhyming as poetry's icing on the cake.

Lovely images though ;)

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

Ohhhhhhhhhhhh, i love this!! Soooooo scrumptious xD I love the second last stanza! xox

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

That was great..LOL

[Antonio Valentino]

Lol, that was rich... love a good twist.

A very, sweet, and satisfying poem, great job!
Antonio :)