Don't be alarmed. Don't be scared. I know its not fair, But I can't tell you who I am.
Although you seen me many times before. Staring at you from afar. I even saw you when you brought your first car.
But rejoice that you have not truly seen me! For in the day you do your life will retreat. Be glad you do not know my true name. But I tell you I am the being of fame.
I am what makes the dogs bark at night, The chilling wolfs howl. I am the midnight lions roar,
I am more silent then the night, More deadly then a venomous snake bite. I am what drives a person insane in war. I am a salesmen without a quota.
Do you still want to know my name? I assure you I cannot be tamed! If you must know then read my words carefully, And pray you do not meet me.
This is good, but you need to do a little damage control. "Wolves" not "wolfs" and "although you seen me" should be "although you have/you've seen me" and the line, "I am a salesman without a quota" is a little corny for this kind of poem, and kind of takes it down a little. Try coming up with something a little better for that line (I'm sure you can). Aside from those few things, this is good. Nice work
This makes me think, and at this time of night, that isn't a good thing xD. Um, this is a good poem, and I noticed a few mistakes, but I'm sure plenty of people have already pointed them out, so I'm not gonna bother with that. Overall this was an interesting read. Glad I can finally review your stuff again :D
This is good, but you need to do a little damage control. "Wolves" not "wolfs" and "although you seen me" should be "although you have/you've seen me" and the line, "I am a salesman without a quota" is a little corny for this kind of poem, and kind of takes it down a little. Try coming up with something a little better for that line (I'm sure you can). Aside from those few things, this is good. Nice work
Yes Death is always near. You create a very good story. Death allow us to create great tales and stories. I like the feel and the ending. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote
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