Rise

Something I thought everyone should do

I am down to one knee
Feeling my sweat all over me
My lungs are a flame
My Muscles are begging to give out
I stare down at the ground
At my reflection in a sweat puddle
I see the strain on my face
I see my nostrils flare
Drawing in precious air
I have never been this tired
I trained so hard to prepare
I look ahead and see you lying there
You told me you wouldn't fight fare
You told me my life is what you do not care
Bringing the pain is what you said you would do
I never thought that could be true
So here we are you on your back
Me on my knee
I'm glad its over
You surly would have killed me
To my surprise I see you rise
Now I can see the devil in your eyes
I cannot lose
You must not defeat me
I grit my teeth
I pull from deep down inside of me
I rise
I stand tall with my resolve
I will never fall again
I will only rise
To win it all

Author's Note

This is something I thought of given my situation. Everyone is battling in this world against a seemingly unbeatable foe. But we all must Rise and meet the challenge, because he won't stop till we are all dead.

Reviews

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

this piece is very inspirational. I like it!

vincent
www.esprit.aegauthorblogs.com

[Jessica Mai]

I enjoyed this. I really liked "precious air" for some reason. It made me feel like i was in your position feeling what you were feeling. Great write.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this is right on because we all have problems. The world is so bad and people are just going to get worse in my opinion. And it's true everyone does battle against an unbeatable foe. I agree with this whole poem. Nice write. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Taylor H.]

I'm making up for reviews I haven't returned. So you may get a few from me depending :). OK, I loved this poem and I completely agree with what you said!

[Snapdragon]

You have a very definite gift. I love the rhyming and pace in this poem. Really lovely and true. What else is there to do but keep on going and fighting?

[James Watts]

So true. I can relate. This was a well written piece and a very nice way to let it out and show us your strength. Excellent write, my friend.

[Chantel]

This is really good! I love it. :)
Some spelling and grammar could be fixed a little, but other than that, this is suuuuch a good poem!!! :)

[thatbryngirl]

i loved the flow.

very inspirational and powerful.

its very very good. keep writing!

[JENY]

Good…
What we need is…
This optimistic outlook…..
I liked the lines very much……

[Liza]

i have felt this but you have expressed it smoothly and clearly
the fire within, the tightness - i have felt sick
who will heal me when everyone seems to be battling something
i am the center of the universe so writing keeps my emotions in check; letting it go and moving on, falling and getting up...