It's bee twenty long years since he passed that test A very good teacher he would become Not to fail like all the rest His battles became the stuff of legend Stories the told of him Of his supposed dying breath He accomplished the impossible With out even trying enemies bounced off his chest Time takes its toll The body goes the way of all flesh From dust we were born Dust we become at death Not this warrior though He lives on This is no jest He fights day and night Striking foes down so we can rest The warrior is a man A man tougher then one would guess IF you marry such a warrior Never forget He strives to pass every test
Not sure where this came from. Hey leave me alone. its 9am and I have been up all night. At least one poem I wrote tonight was bound to turn out to be crap.
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Pwetty picture :] I noticed in the first line, "It's bee twenty long years" bee=been. Other than that I don't think I saw any mistakes, and I'm sure I've said this hundreds of times, but this is an amazing poem. Warriors are flippin awesome :D
it was very creative. It was most definately not crap. I write some of my best pieces when i cant even think to get out of bed. Its usually about 3 in the morning that ideas just pop up for me. This piece shows that there is a story behind every word. I loved it.
I like how this warrior is described so unique and powerful. I think everyone would inspire this warrior as everyone wants to overcome enemies and be the best in the world. But death worries us all to be this warrior you would live forever that would help a lot of people that are scared of death. Overall this warrior has many qualities what other people would enjoy to have. The warrior is inspring and this write is inspiring as it brings the warrior to life
I'm an inspiring writer that has a million and ten thoughts running through his head all day. I joined this site because my wife inspired me to. I was not prepared for the thoughts to jump out so much.. more..