Here I am gasping for air Hard to believe I am trying to stand back on the chair I thought this would be quick I thought this would be Shameless But here I am struggling to change this My life has been pain Always ending in rain I can't imagine how long this is taking My life flash images like a painting I can feel my lungs clasping now The images show me I should be proud I came a long way since that day My life wasn't rotting away I shade tears of love Tears of hate To think my life is ending over a plate An argument over things as of late My eyes roll back as I start to faint Finally I go numb I did this for my wife's sake.
First off, I flippin LOVE the picture! :D I believe the other reviewers did well as the 'review' part, so Imma just ramble.
The images show me I should be proud
I came a long way since that day
My life wasn't rotting away - This was definatley my favorite lines. It spoke to me, ya know? Anywho nice job(:
i agree with shattered tears. im sure this piece is inspiring as any other you write. i can definately relate myself and have had these thoughts cross my mind before i realize what im thinking. but i have been here.
I think it is…..
“Shed tears…..”
Nice creation…….
But I think….you do not bother about….
Poetic beauty…I mean rhyming…and all that….cant you try…?
You express everything…in a touching way….
I'm an inspiring writer that has a million and ten thoughts running through his head all day. I joined this site because my wife inspired me to. I was not prepared for the thoughts to jump out so much.. more..