Forsaken

Forsaken

A Poem by Daniel Gardner
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All most out of emotions...

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Why have you done this?
Why have you left me?
You told me you never would.
You told me you understood.

How could you leave me?
How could you betray me?
You told everyone you would not go astray.
You told everyone you would be here till your dying day.

Why am I your martyr?
Why do you continue to run farther?
You told me I was not like the rest.
You told me I was the best.

Why have you lied?
Why have you made me cry?
You made me a fool.
You made me your tool.

Why did you do this?
Why have you put me to the test?
You made me your final test.
You killed me, just like the rest.

© 2010 Daniel Gardner


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I love the way you shaped the poem, the emotions build until you seem to feel like screaming out your dissapointment and rage. Beautiful and definately something understandable!!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


You can feel the emotion in this, very clever indeed.

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is great. I loved it! Very powerful poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


good write. very powerful. very good job portraying emotion and the stanza breakdown made it flow easy very nice

Posted 14 Years Ago


Such Strong Emotion ,lota emotion in this poem very nice work

Posted 14 Years Ago


Such strength in your words in this poem. So many questions were ask and the answers were not what was needed. A powerful poem. Ending made poem more powerful. This is a outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wonderful! I love the structure and the repetition. Keep it up. Absolutely great work. 100/100!!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow….
Fantastic…..
I liked it…..very sincere words…


Posted 14 Years Ago


I know how you feel.. I think we've all been through something like this at one point in our life no matter how old we are.. It happens to the best of us and things will always take a turn for the worse before they ever get better..

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very strong in emotion, I feel the pain.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Daniel Gardner
Daniel Gardner

Monroe, GA



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