We walk by and breaths is all I hear My lips quiver Just to call you near So silent we have be come Not realizing the setting sun Our love has run dry No more will we be alive Limbo is no more I fear Now we turn a deaf ear Like a mime trapped in a box Silent motions convey our thoughts For in the end The silence will infect our hearts
good, powerful emotion. nice job. i really do love the way your show your emotion through your poetry its very thought provoking and makes it interesting to read. good depth to it as well.
Very sad, but, I think, sometimes very true... though silence does not have to be a bad thing. I like the subtle rhyming, it's not a very obvious pattern but somehow there is rhyming, and it makes it more fluent :)
Awl...very sad. Sometimes the distance just kind of sneaks up on us. That is when a couple says how did we get to this place. I like the reference to a mime trapped in a box. Kudos.
I don't know. I like the silence and quiet time my self. I like the feel in the poem. A intense feel of raw emotion waiting for something to happen. A very well written poem with a very strong story. A excellent poem.
Coyote
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