No one knows the rage within No one wants to believe it The shade of red does it no justice I cannot stand anymore This rage blisters like a sore It festers It oozes Decaying the flesh around it They watch as I grab my chest Feeling the evil blade plunged deep within My mind is a blaze The smoke blocking all logic Its consuming me Slow my eyes change to black Cotton drys my mouth Blood courses out my nose Finally my rage is set free Terrified and in pain I will make everyone suffer A care I do not have in the world Only one can guess how it came about But its to late A Plague I will unleash Of fear and no peace.
The last two lines are great for the poem, but you have a few typos, like "drys" should be "dries" and "But its to late", "to" should be "too". It feels like the poem is a little choppy since the rhyming isn't consistent, but at the same time that makes it a little more real. Good job.
you mustve been very mad or something. i want to say its a dark piece but that wouldnt do itself justice. it was amazing in the dark and evil way. it screams to all who read it. very terrifying to read when you see the words in perfect form and no sentences that fully end but every word having eternal meaning in your mind. i loved it.
Very dark and sinister, I love it! I really love the last lines "A plague I will unleash of fear and no peace." Great work as always, keep it up! :) 100/100
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