Cold

Thoughts racing in my head again begging to be let out.

I'm Freezing
I'm Frozen
I'm Numb
Right down to my very soul
Hell is not hot
It's cold
Worst then the coldest winter
On the darkest night
Chilling my bones
As if from fright
I am dead
My blood turned to ice
I tried to warn them
I did so even twice
All they said was nice
Feelings are gone
The pain is a badge torn
Time inches like a worm
Traveling through a winter storm
In the end my frozen touch will only burn

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Reviews

[Eric Cox]

Awesome imagery in this. Very well penned.

[<3 Simply Rebekah <3]

I love the last line, "in the end my frozen touch will only burn"
sweet poem man
(this is so going in my faves)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was a good write. I really enjoyed this. It was very well written to. Thanks for sharing. :)

[manjula.babaladi]

The poem really gives the feel of chill.. "Hell is not hot
It's cold" Liked these lines and the imagination they carry. Nice piece of work :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

Your poem is amazing. Read like a Dante lines in one of his stories. The strong words create a vision of pain and suffering. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[GunMetal]

Nice, I like the last line, how it describes a frozen touch burning. I can't imagine what this kind of cold must be like (not that I'd want to). The only line I don't get is "The pain is a badge torn", it may just be me, but I can't dissect the simile. Overall, a good piece.

[Ruth]

Love the end line! Good piece xx

[Senseless whatever]

Excellent write. Great perspective and the piece flows beautifully.
"Feelings are gone
The pain is a badge torn
Time inches like a worm
Traveling through a winter storm"
Love those lines..

[JENY]

Apt choice of words….
Nice reading…..

[ashley]

Another fantastic write. Powerful. Great job! :D